landerson

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205 points to Logliner

on After offering a kidney to her sister they discover they were both adopted. They go on a search for family and a kidney based only on their Mum’s old diary.PS Adoptive parents are dead, can’t see how to fit that in.

Switch it. A dead Kidney donor is found to be an exact match for her recipient, meaning they were twins. The recipient must go on a detective hunt to find out how and why they were separated, and the search…
on A repentant terrorist decided to erase his memory and start over new life, but soon he was chased by his past

try something like: When a child soldier forced to do terrorist acts kills his own cousin and tries to reform his life, he soon finds the cousin's family are still out for revenge
on Two narcissistic TV presenters host televised death in a darkly comic indictment of infotainment

And..? This is not a logline. Try WHEN (something happens) a FLAWED CHARACTER (your hero) must ACT IN A SPECIFIC WAY (do something) to CHANGE THINGS.
on Relationship between the group of friends change as they take trip to Vegas.

not a logline
on In a last-ditch effort to get rid of her eye sore car, a paranoid business woman risks being mugged in a particularly shady part of town by an unknown and potentially dangerous buyer.

It's a plan, not a plot. Might start with: 'when she is mugged while selling her eyesore car in a shady part of town and left without money or identity, a paranoid businesswoman must reshape her whole life and find…

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