Loe Jones

Penpusher · 85 points

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2 loglines
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When a young teen discovers his mother is alive, he must confront his brother to learn the truth about her absence and decide who to trust in their fractured family.

February 23, 2023
When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can withstand her curse, and her temper.

June 22, 2022

on When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can withstand her curse, and her temper.

Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it. Would something like this work: When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can be with her without touch, or else…
on When her family unexpectedly comes back into her life after years of estrangement, a young woman must confront her past and the people who will never accept her for who she is.

It's really clear. I like it. My only suggestion would be to put 'a young woman' before the event, however I still think its a strong logline as it is.
on When two friends wake up to a sunless morning, they learn their roommate hasn’t come home from last night. After a failure to contact him or anyone else, they venture outside in an attempt to understand this anomaly.

It feels like there is two different plot lines. Are they related? It's a good start, but I feel it would be clearer if you make the relation more defined.
on When he notices that the camera-man on set is an alien planning on taking over the world, the percipient lead actor must convince the rest of the crew to save the planet.

Putting 'When he' at the start is a little confusing. Personally I would put that it is the lead actor first. Otherwise I like the idea. Nice logline.