Maidenscombe

Logliner · 375 points

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6 loglines
32 reviews

A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”

September 4, 2012
Waking from a four year coma David is told his daughter just died. He joins a counselling group, but it’s three months before his daughter dies. He wants to change his daughters future, the counsellor argues it isn’t possible.

September 1, 2012
The Toodyay magistrate hates the name Moondyne Joe; he steals his food giving it to the poor. Ruby loves Joe, the witch Vixana likes Joe. Police long for the day they capture Joe. Good on yer, Moondyne Joe.

July 20, 2012
Feeling danger, the Goddess calls the riders of the winged white unicorns to seek humanities threat. Finding the army of Gargoyles, the armies of the Bouicendeni rise, the sound waves of their battle cry are caste at the Gargoyles feet, exploding in the ground the Gargoyles are thrust up into the atmosphere and their deaths.

July 8, 2012
Distraught that his favourite daughter was captured. King Neptune wanted her back, now he is getting angry, very angry.

May 27, 2012
Finding that the term for several lesbian vampires is a ‘bed’. Going to Pornithian House, the Lesbian Vampires Hunters and friends go to rid the bed of lesbian vampires from the house of Porn.

May 22, 2012

on A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”

sharkeatingman, your comment of my 'overwhelming desire to be right' probably comes from my desire to be right, once. The film, The Sixth Sense is one of my favourite films, I've watched it 30 or so times. My understanding of…
on A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”

With regard to the way I wrote the logline, if it is wrong then fair enough. You are the expert, I am the beginner. But your understanding of the film itself is, I consider to be, lacking. Should I rewrite…
on A nurse helps two vampires rob a mobile blood bank.

Where is the humour in the logline?
on A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”

sharkeatingman, what film were you watching? Quote-The fact that the boy character reminds him of another isn't relative to the bigger picture. I saw the film being about a child psychologist treating a child who sees dead people. The film…
on A historian from a line of disgraced fortune hunters discovers a treasure map on the back of the Declaration of Independence.

Hopefully the film was made by an American. You may well get finance to make the film by mentioning the Declaration of Independance, but to the rest of the world, is it of any importance? It is a long time…
on A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”

CraigBerger, This was put in the wrong section, it should have gone into the 'classics' section. As stated it is a logline for the film The Sixth Sense.
on In another universe, a young girl stumbles upon a plot in the kidnapping of children by a religious organization called the Magisterium, who will stop at nothing to ensure the continuation of their doctrine and hold over the world they live in.

Given that this is your logline for an existing film, The Golden Compass. Was the Magisterium a religious organisation? Given that the sequel was stopped because of religious group (catholics) I'd leave out the religious aspect completely. (Don't you think…
on When a socially inept nerdy teen falls for the newest cool girl in town, he must battle her 7 evil exes before he can date her.

That film was on the TV the night before last, guess the name of the lead?
on A well-dressed fashion mannequin desperately wants to build a real life of friends, family, work and love – but his true nature is catastrophically revealed during a date with the woman of his dreams.

Oh bugger, I didn't realise the mannequin was animated. I looked at what you'd written for ages, but it didn't move. Just describing it as a fashional mannequin should be enough, then putting that it wants a life of real…
on A well-dressed fashion mannequin desperately wants to build a real life of friends, family, work and love – but his true nature is catastrophically revealed during a date with the woman of his dreams.

Have you used the word mannequin figuratively or literally?