MattyB

Penpusher · 110 points

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When a coke-dealing security guard at a grocery store finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting, he discovers that he isn’t the only one leading a double life.

September 12, 2012
During San Francisco’s Mayoral race a security guard addicted to cocaine finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting and discovers that he isn’t the only one leading a double life.

September 12, 2012
In a story where no one is who they seem to be, a young security guard addicted to cocaine finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting perpetrated by one of his co-workers.

September 12, 2012
A broke college student attends an interview where he is forced by a megalomaniacal artist to break up with his girlfriend, tell off his landlord, and quit his temp job only to find that he has gone to the wrong interview.

July 13, 2012

on In a story where no one is who they seem to be, a young security guard addicted to cocaine finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting perpetrated by one of his co-workers.

woops, typo. When a security guard who deals coke out of the grocery store where he works finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting, he discovers that he isn't the only one with a double life.
on In a story where no one is who they seem to be, a young security guard addicted to cocaine finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting perpetrated by one of his co-workers.

Thanks for the input. Here is another draft. When a security guard who deals coke out of the grocery store where he finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting, he discovers that he isn't the only one with…
on A broke college student attends an interview where he is forced by a megalomaniacal artist to break up with his girlfriend, tell off his landlord, and quit his temp job only to find that he has gone to the wrong interview.

Added some character description in there. I think it accentuates their opposing character traits. I will definitely post it! I am writing it now and will be raising funds and looking for producers in the fall. Here is a link…
on A broke college student attends an interview where he is forced by a megalomaniacal artist to break up with his girlfriend, tell off his landlord, and quit his temp job only to find that he has gone to the wrong interview.

Is this better? "At a job interview a broke college student is forced by a psychotic artist to break up with his girlfriend, tell off his landlord, and quit his temp job only to find that he has gone to…
on War Voices

I need more details in the logline. I think you might have put your logline in the description section below it.
on One bad order turns a coffeehouse into a battlefield.

I can definitely see it! I have several friends who work in the service industry and have heard stories that could fit for this in a pinch. The logline leaves me with interesting visuals. My only suggestion would be to…