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A promising musician delves into dreams of a seductively beautiful violinist while trying to maintain reality with his wife and son.

December 20, 2013

on A promising musician delves into dreams of a seductively beautiful violinist while trying to maintain reality with his wife and son. ★ Accepted

Using lucid dream techniques, a promising musician investigates his haunting visions and dreams while trying to maintain reality with his wife and son.
on A promising musician delves into dreams of a seductively beautiful violinist while trying to maintain reality with his wife and son.

A promising musician investigates the reasons behind his haunting dreams and visions while maintaining reality with his wife and son.
on In dystopian future governed by a biotechnology corporation, a young woman’s investigation into her father’s sudden disappearance leads her to believe he is a test-subject in a secret government location called “The Factory”. When she finds herself with a group of prisoners on a vehicle heading towards an unknown location, she realizes she is on her way to The Factory and must find her father and escape before they are changed forever.

Who is the girl? What importance is she? Why would they take her father? I believe if you bare it down. We don't need to know if it's in the future or not. Just the significance of why.
on A mother and daughter find themselves stranded in the middle of the night on an abandoned road. Deep in the surrounding woods a nightmarish terror stalks them, and they must find the courage to face the beast or be destroyed by it.

Condense it down. This will make you find the true nature of your story.