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• on When stranded in her partner’s old ski village on the anniversary of his disappearance, a distraught woman must finally kill the old thing that’s been lurking in the snow.

  I'd personally drop the when and reword the star more like, "Stranded on the anniversary of her partner's disappearance in his old ski village..." To me that comes right out the gate with impact, of course this is a personal…

• on A young black man accidentally travels to the past. He is decided to save his great-grandmother, a slave, with the help of her owner’s son

  I agree I like the idea you are building but the wording needs work. We've got our protagonist, what appears to be an obstacle though the way it's presented doesn't feel like a strong call. Build on that, this should…