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When a space colony team land on a habitable planet, they discover a buried alien race and an object that threatens the fate of their lives – and the earth.
Cool. Sounds like a film that I would like to see. The only critique I could think of is to possibly mention something about the protagonist(s).
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When a government Space station is taken over by a terrorist organisation, its paper pushing engineer must escape to help protect both his wife and national security
Sounds like a pretty interesting idea. I find it odd that an engineer could be a paper pusher though. When I think of engineer I think of someone doing the work and fixing and designing machinery. I think the part…
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Mauled by a rabid dog, a truck driver stumbles down the road to a nearby trailer park and begs for help. But when the residents refuse to come to his aide his condition worsens and he becomes a ruthless killer.
Hey Richiev and Kriss, Thanks for the suggestions. I wasn't actually intending to tell the story from the killer's POV so your comments have proved helpful in making me think of another way to do this logline. Perhaps, something along…
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A contestant on the Bachelor-esque show “Token of Love” hatches a plot to win the secret million dollar prize with the help of the show’s cynical host.
A lot of potential in this idea. I think it would be more interesting if the host tried to help them win though instead of stealing, which is what it sounds like they are planning.
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After a troubled teen girl is caught vandalizing state property, she is ordered to spend 6 months in juvenile detention center; where she falls in love with the, married, faculty art teacher.
Intriguing start, but I agree with the others. We need to have some sort of conflict.
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When an acerbic alcoholic finds himself penniless and alone he has no choice but to crash his family’s holiday. Years of alienating them makes for a stiff challenge, but eventually he subtly helps them heal.
I agree with the other comments here, but I would also take out acerbic. When writing a log line you want to use words that are so common people have no trouble knowing their meaning because these little snippets are…
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A former gang member, now an undercover cop, travels through a dangerous inner-city labyrinth to kill a notorious gang leader. Boyz n the Hood meets Apocalypse Now.
Seems like it needs more. What makes this story unique? What makes it stand out from every other crime drama with gang members turned cops? A former gang member chasing a gang leader is interesting but it needs to be…
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With armageddon approaching, a museum security guard with a background in psychology must destroy the Egyptian god of chaos, who is disguising himself as various museum employees while committing a grisly string of murders.
Here is another version: "With armageddon approaching, a security guard with a background in forensic psychology must destroy the egyptian god of chaos, who is brutally murdering people at a local museum."
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When a biochemical corporation manufactures implants that help millions live longer, they go from pariah to savior. But a longstanding critic remains unconvinced, and must battle the corporation and its backers to uncover the shocking secret behind the technology.
This sounds really good. It needs to have a little more conflict though. What stands in his way? Just investigating a biochemical company is interesting but you have to make it interesting enough for people to pay money to see…
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With armageddon approaching, a museum security guard with a background in psychology must destroy the Egyptian god of chaos, who is disguising himself as various museum employees while committing a grisly string of murders.
Thanks to everyone for the help so far :)
