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When her raw, tell-all article about her marriage goes viral, a struggling writer must navigate a toxic, public literary feud with her successful husband to finally achieve the fame and recognition she craves.
Didn’t this script receive a mention on the Black List? Love how you took the premise and distilled everything down! 🙂
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Following the mysterious disappearance of their community, a young fugitive and his animal companion must step out of the shadows in search of answers, embarking on a journey where revealing their identity and forbidden power could prove deadly.
Hi, isanatera! Right now this logline is too vague. Right now, it’s the seed of what will hopefully become a really good story. It tells us that the story has secrets, but doesn’t explain what makes those secrets interesting or…
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After losing his royal security post when India gains independence, a disillusioned officer travels to Britain in search of a new life but becomes entangled in violent protests, political corruption, and the disappearance of the Prime Minister. As a secret organization pushes to seize control of the nation, he must choose between rescuing the kidnapped leader or stopping a rebellion that could change the country’s future
Forgive the typos XD
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After losing his royal security post when India gains independence, a disillusioned officer travels to Britain in search of a new life but becomes entangled in violent protests, political corruption, and the disappearance of the Prime Minister. As a secret organization pushes to seize control of the nation, he must choose between rescuing the kidnapped leader or stopping a rebellion that could change the country’s future
Hey CG! Right now, your logline reads like this: A disgraced royal officer arrives in Britain seeking redemption, but becomes ensnared in a coup between a vanished Prime Minister and a secretive cabal, forcing him to confront his past and…
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On a normal day, a couple from university arrive in the NY city with same plan for one weekend, but a series of unexpected events happens to them after which their relationship, dreams and views on what they want change throughout a rainy day in a big city.
Hey Sofia! Try something like this: College sweethearts arrive NYC to _______ (You mentioned that they had the same plan for the weekend. For this blank, tell us specifically what they have planned), but ________ happens (You mentioned a series…
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A “guinea pig” A US Infantry division, formed immediately after Pearl Harbor and populated with middle-aged draftees, becomes the most respected, effective and feared unit in the Pacific Theater, earning the nickname “The Old Bastards”.
Gotcha! So like a miniseries like Band of Brothers or The Pacific? That sounds like I really cool idea! Even for a series or a miniseries though, it still needs to hint at the conflict. Try tweaking it slightly. For…
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A “guinea pig” A US Infantry division, formed immediately after Pearl Harbor and populated with middle-aged draftees, becomes the most respected, effective and feared unit in the Pacific Theater, earning the nickname “The Old Bastards”.
It’s got potential, but (and I’m assuming that this is meant to be a feature film), it needs to get more specific. Take the film The Ministry of Ungentlemanly Warfare as an example. It’s inspired by the true story of…
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A frustrated architect works on soulless industrial projects, with the dream of building his ideal building.
Tired of working on soulless industrial projects, a frustrated architect decides to undertake ________ project, but everything hits the fan when he encounters ________ obstacle.
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A frustrated architect works on soulless industrial projects, with the dream of building his ideal building.
★ Accepted
Hi, Rick! You’ve got a character flaw and some internal motivation which is great. But now you need an external conflict or opposition.
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An incisive detective imprisons a man who is murdered in prison while innocent, so he resigns out of remorse to free unjustly incarcerated people in defiance of the system he once defended.
Is great that you provide a source of internal motivation or drive for your protagonist; however, it lacks an external conflict or some sort of opposition or obstacle. A rewrite might look like After imprisoning an innocent man, a remorseful…
