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A corporate executive is forced to choose between taking his dream job overseas with his new girlfriend or staying to try and repair his relationship with his estranged brooding teenage daughter when she announce she’s pregnant.
I like the ingredients. It's not the stuff of blockbusters, but can be executed to succeed as a Comedy. My main issue with it is that it reads as if the hero will deliberate on this decision for the entire…
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1999. Reception lounges are dying. After six years banishment, a CBD event manager reluctantly returns to work in The Palace, his old man’s Greek reception lounge in the suburbs, on their biggest wedding ever, and he will save his family from financial ruin and shame— If his father will just let him.
Updated: A playboy event manager must swallow a six year feud with his father and work alongside him in the old man's outdated Greek reception lounge, on their biggest wedding ever, to save his family from financial ruin and shame?…
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In the final days of WWII, when a B-29 carrying the 3rd atomic bomb to be dropped on Japan crash lands on a small enemy held island the pilot, Capt. Mark Younger is captured and imprisoned in a POW camp where he must choose between helping the POWs escape, and doing his duty to stop the enemy at all costs from hijacking the atomic bomb, even if it means detonating it manually.
I'm familiar with your story. Seeing it here, I am reminded of the strength of your premise. Your film promises to tell a fresh chapter in a popular story - the legend of WWII. In genre, it promises a War…
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A young man is forced from his conservative Mormon upbringing, into the pits of the United Mexican States, where he discovers his gift under the guidance of Santa Muerte – search, stalk, and execute.
Your gift for evocative words comes through, especially with your fabrications eg 'United Mexican States'. Also, many loglines are void of a sense of location context, so you have an advantage there. 'young man' - try more specific and evocative…
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When a meticulous hitman is hired to kill a prominent mobster, he unwittingly becomes a tool in a complex scheme of revenge by a woman he regards as nothing more than a one night stand.
I like it!... Wait... On first read, I assume it's the hitman who has the one night stand... Then she entangles him in a scheme to kill the mobster. Our guy is the professional hitman who never takes any chances,…
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Afraid of what the acrid city air might be doing to their unborn child, a man and his young wife retreat to the countryside to spend a weekend on a camping break. Faced with the unbearable beauty of what the city had left of the countryside while mourning the loss of his own innocence, the man crumbles under the pressures of his impending fatherhood and submits to a violent, emotional regression in the hopes of appealing to the maternity of nature.
I have mixed feelings about this. I like the soul of your film... But you have articulated the intellectual and emotional journey of the protagonist. What the action will be, - beyond travel into the forest, hang out, delve into…
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When a penniless young writer steals a suitcase full of dirty money a street enforcer from Japan is sent to track him down and an epic struggle begins on the streets of East London.
Firstly, I like this action story. It has a fish out of water enforcer, bringing his Eastern kick ass to the streets of East London. I would review the following items: 'penniless young writer' - How does him being a…
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After accidentally discovering a superhero’s secret identity, a young psychiatrist is coerced into treating the various mental disorders of a group of eccentric crime-fighters.
I like this superhero story, which reads as if it will be told through a genre other than Action. It's not clear what the genre is: Comedy? Thriller? The stakes are not clear. The young psychiatrist must treat the mental…
