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An underpaid banker gets a venomous dose of indigenous sorcery when he abuses a loophole to syphon money from a deceased account intended for a community group.
What's his goal? What must he do when he gets the venomous does of black magic?
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A travelling taco truck smuggling psilocybin mushrooms encounters an interstellar hitchhiker on an interstate highway. Is this interplanetary visitor legit, and are his warnings of an impending alien apocalypse worth heeding?
My take, trying to keep it under 25: Warned by an interstellar hitchhiker, two stoners in a taco truck must receive a psychedelic message on a mountain to stop aliens invading.
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A dorky accountant has to overcome his fear of the ocean and learn to surf in order to attend a father-son surf competition so his son can hang with the cool kids, one of whose dads just so happens to be his high school nemesis.
You shouldn't, its your idea! :)
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When the entire 9th grade turn into robots overnight, a brash class captain must lead them to an underwater fortress before the military destroys them.
BOAT???? haha thanks for that insight Richiev. I didn't realize "captain" was such a poor word choice... I didn't mean sea captain but class captain i.e. the class president! In my school they were called captains so it totally missed…
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A dorky accountant has to overcome his fear of the ocean and learn to surf in order to attend a father-son surf competition so his son can hang with the cool kids, one of whose dads just so happens to be his high school nemesis.
Yeah, I think acceptance is relatable enough! Here's my take: An ocean-fearing accountant must beat his high school nemesis in a father-son surf competition to earn his son's respect.
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When his 7-year-old son drops the c-bomb in class, Jack, a kind hearted but foul mouthed family man, is given an ultimatum by his wife, sex or swearing.
Stakes too low, I'm finding it hard to care. Obviously you just stop swearing. THE END.
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When Earth is threatened by a cosmic war, a young woman with newly-awakened powers becomes mankind’s only defense.
It's strong, but: What is the woman's occupation/strength/flaw? What are her powers? And who is warring with Earth?
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When an overworked data analyst mistakenly drives down an infinitely repeating highway, he and his mates must break the loop and get to Vegas.
Thanks to all for the comments! Good point Bryson and almiiitey about why Vegas is important. Getting to Vegas was their original goal, but once trapped, the main goal is to escape this bizarre highway (and the stakes are obvious).…
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After a translator’s wife is found murdered and turned into a shadow creature, Charlie must interpret her glitched speech to discover the mystery behind her death.
Okay here are my thoughts: Cool inciting incident! Strong goal, but interpreting glitched speech doesn't sound very cinematic Is Charlie the translator? It's not clear. Also, no need to use names as it doesn't help sell the script. What are…
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The fight for the future begins when a computer hacker learns the world exists in the sophisticated alternate reality of a computer program called The Matrix
Freed from a simulated dream world controlled by evil machines, a disillusioned hacker must fight virtual agents in bullet-time to free humanity.
