Peter Nguyen

Penpusher · 160 points

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2 loglines
8 reviews

A comedy series about an owner of a dysfunctional Gold Coast gym, who finds himself embroiled in a drug war when he turns to selling illegal weight-loss pills to pay off a debt. (FOR MEETUP ONLINE)

January 23, 2015
A drama series that follows three young aspiring fashion designers as the find themselves entangled in a power struggle against each other and the ruthless matriarch of the Australian fashion industry.

January 12, 2015

on A career girl convinced her instinctive man-picker is broken, creates a complicated love square when she discovers the sequence that triggers love and lust in the brain, and uses it to transfer her infatuation with an unavailable co-worker to her “just friends” bestie.

I'm really confused here. What's a man-picker? So your MC has a machine that can make anyone fall in love with her? Or she uses the machine to pacifiy her feeling for a co-worker? Could you give us a short…
on In a post apocalyptic Mexico, a pregnant teen risks her life to cross the closed border so her son can be born an American citizen.

Totally agree with Adam. That would make a very compelling premise.
on Harlow Reeve, an orphaned teenager becomes aware of her teleportation abilities when she looks into her parents past. Social Media discloses her secret, when she is caught on camera, the world suddenly starts to become aware of her divergence

I do like the concept. 'Harlow Reeve, an orphaned teenager becomes aware of her teleportation abilities when she looks into her parents past' -Too much unnecessary information. Here's my take: When an orphaned teenager's teleportation ability gets caught on camera…
on In a post apocalyptic pandemic world a teenage girl trying to reach the safety of quarantine takes refuge in a valley, only to be thrust into a fight for her life with a man willing to kill her to get what he wants

The stakes are not high enough. Essentially, she's just going from A to B and a crazy dude trying to kill her in between. There has to be a better reason for her to go to the quarantine area. This…
on A struggling businessman has his world upended when a train explosion leaves him wounded in an untamed jungle. He’ll have to survive the elements, the wildlife and a forgotten tribe if he ever wants to see his family again.

Maybe something along these lines. After an overseas business trip goes wrong, a struggling white collar worker finds himself wounded and stranded in an hostile African jungle and must get to the last train before the monsoon season hits.
on An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

Two former lovers accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and tries to get closure before one of them leaves the country ? forever! The best example I got unless there is actually a ticking time…
on After the death of an elderly millionaire, his estranged offspring haul their families cross-country in order to retrieve their deceased father’s inheritance.

If you're going for a family comedy kind of thing then I would write something like this: When an elderly millionaire dies, his estranged(or *bickering*) children and their families are forced to take a road trip together across the country…
on A disgraced scientist sends a message into a blackhole, never expecting the terrifying message it sends back, now he has just days to prove to the world that this time he is right.

I must say this is a really good premise! I feel the logline does the job in enticing the reader. I've read a lot of these loglines on this site and this is the only one that got me hooked.…

A comedy series about an owner of a dysfunctional Gold Coast gym, who finds himself embroiled in a drug war when he turns to selling illegal weight-loss pills to pay off a debt. (FOR MEETUP ONLINE)

A drama series that follows three young aspiring fashion designers as the find themselves entangled in a power struggle against each other and the ruthless matriarch of the Australian fashion industry.