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With an uncanny ability to foresee death while painting, an artist’s prediction forces him to abandon his true love in order to save her.
Thank you everyone for all your suggestions. I reworked the line and I think I like the new version.
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With an uncanny ability to foresee death while painting, an artist’s prediction forces him to abandon his true love in order to save her.
No sir, you are right. I updated based on your suggestions. You are actually brilliant. But to answer your question, the action he takes is: he enters into a clandestine affair with her when she returns, but that's a lot…
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With an uncanny ability to foresee death while painting, an artist’s prediction forces him to abandon his true love in order to save her.
Yes, 'predict' death or foresee. Him being a portrait artist has nothing to do with it, just identifies him. His lost love isn't dead. Just separated from him, so maybe an update. Thank you for your input.
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With an uncanny ability to literally see the souls of his clients, a gifted portrait artist finds fame, fortune, and love; but when his true love escapes his grasp, he encounters a struggle to maintain his sanity while reclaiming his lost love.
Thank you. I truly appreciate the input. I am in the processing of putting your suggestion to use right now.
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In the future, the UK is completely overseen by CCTV. There are three blind spots, and in one week four men must organise three high-profile murders — one to take place in each.
I don't understand completely what's taking place here. What is CCTV? What are blind spots? Three high profile murders to take place in each what? blindspot? It sounds riveting, but you should make a bit clearer.
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A widower discovers he’s been left a fortune by his late wife, but simultaneously realises she has a secret past which might change his opinion of her forever. In her death, he comes to know her better than he ever did whilst they were married.
I get the entire premise without the second sentence. I don't think you need that.
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When a hyper-connected, workaholic single woman swears off the Internet and her smartphone for Lent, her whole life goes to hell in a handbasket.
Very funny.
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Sex , psychism and cigarettes. Oh my. A small town, southern girl migrates to the big city where she meets two professional women and begins a ritual of food, friendship, and betrayal; but when sudden memories of her past arise, she struggles to decide the best path to redemption.
Thank you. It does.
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Sex , psychism and cigarettes. Oh my. A small town, southern girl migrates to the big city where she meets two professional women and begins a ritual of food, friendship, and betrayal; but when sudden memories of her past arise, she struggles to decide the best path to redemption.
Still working on it. Thank you
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On the run from a determined street enforcer, a young Londoner will do anything and everything to avoid capture but the enforcer has pledged to kill himself in the event of failure.
Reads fine. Captures my attention and makes me interested. By the way, are you a Golden Dawn fan or a member?
