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When a clown fish is kidnapped, an overprotective single father embarks on a dangerous adventure through the foreign ocean to reunite with him.
Not the best logline, this is IMDB's logline for Finding Nemo:?After his son is captured in the Great Barrier Reef and taken to Sydney, a timid clownfish sets out on a journey to bring him home.
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When his wife disappears and society accuses him of being a murderer, he finds tracks that she deliberately left behind. He fights against the media and the police to frame his wife.
I know this is your logline for an already produced movie from a published novel but this gives no clear indication of who the main character is, other than the MC is male. Why is he trying to frame his…
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Trish Humphries a self-absorbed news reporter who just moved to New York finally gets her own talk show. She thinks it’s in a big network, but it’s really just public access. Now she has to learn how to work with her new team and balance her open relationship with her three boyfriends while pursuing her dream to be famous.
At 59 words, its too long for a logline. A logline has to be under 50 words and if its under 25 words thats much better. Unless you are writing a biopic about a public figure, don't put your character…
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When her brother’s diary mysteriously appears at her doorstep, an art forgery investigator uses it to decipher location of stolen diamonds. She also discovers the truth about her father who masterminded an international heist and embarks on a hunt for the treasure during which she finds her family lost decades ago.
I would ignore dpg, he fairly repetitively asks the same questions, and expects the whole plot of a movie to condense down to under 50 words. The point of a logline is to hook the reader, you hook a reader…
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Copernicus’ Secret: It takes a lifetime for Nicolaus Copernicus to re-write our understanding of the Universe but plagued by self-doubt and fear, he’s unwilling to publish until a Protestant Professor risks imprisonment to convince him to publish.
Sorry. Copernicus' Secret is supposed to be the title, but not sure how your supposed to format logline + title in the "post logline" box.
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While trying to fix a noisy microwave, an appliance repair old man tells to his apprentice the strangest stories he witnessed in his job: a single mother hypnotized by her washing machine, an electronics hobbyist tuning a ultrablack screen TV set, a neglected housewife in love with her refrigerator.
Is it a trilogy or a TV show? Or is it a single 2 hour movie in 3 Acts with each act being a separate story? If its a trilogy, you write the story for the first movie in the…
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Story of Catholic clergyman Nicolaus Copernicus who solves the puzzle of the solar system & the Lutheran Mathematics professor who convinces Copernicus to publish.
I have another logline for this. Don't know if its better, it mentions the Reformation but it doesn't make the conflict, church vs science because that's not a conflict at the time. I won't write a story that helps propagate…
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When a survivor of a train crash disrupts her life, a young woman must overcome her circle’s hostility and cope with the abortion she denied for ten years
Let the reader work out whether it is dramatic or not. Can you describe the woman with something other than young? What life does she seek? What causes her to change path? What forces her to deal with the anguish?…
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After he is ‘killed’ by a female undercover cop, an innocent man is ‘saved’ by a female bounty hunter who hallucinates slices of the future and must collect thr bounty on his future badass self.
Whilst this is almost a carbon copy of your previous logline. Simplify this down. Get rid of the killed and saved in quotation marks, it confuses the reader. This might have elements similar to Memento i.e. the time slice flashes…
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When an astronaut learns that his fiancée is sent on a space trip at near-lightspeed, he must find her before their age difference prevents them from ever having a family together.
Love it. Very clear, who the protagonist is, goal and the stakes. I'd watch.
