saurin desai

Penpusher · 105 points

195 points to Logliner

3 loglines
5 reviews

3 followers

When the other 11 jurors pressure him to convict an 18-year-old accused of murdering his father, a soft-spoken loner must convince them to let go of their biases, question their morals, and save the defendant from the electric chair.

June 7, 2021
A workaholic founder of a super-successful start-up, who’s reluctantly taken up a 70-year-old as an intern, must decide whether to hire an external CEO in her stead, when faced with overwhelming work-life balance pressures.

June 6, 2021
A music teacher has a fatal accident, just as he was to achieve his dream of playing jazz professionally, and lands in the ‘Great Before’, from where he desperately tries to find his way back to his body.

June 4, 2021

on A workaholic founder of a super-successful start-up, who’s reluctantly taken up a 70-year-old as an intern, must decide whether to hire an external CEO in her stead, when faced with overwhelming work-life balance pressures.

Hi Mike, Thank you so much for the detailed responses to two of my loglines. You have given me so much food for thought. Immense gratitude for the same. And I apologize for the delay in my revert. I will…
on A music teacher has a fatal accident, just as he was to achieve his dream of playing jazz professionally, and lands in the ‘Great Before’, from where he desperately tries to find his way back to his body.

Thank you, Odie, for your review and your inputs. I was unaware that multiple commas are frowned upon in loglines. Here's a slightly revised version: A music teacher who is about to achieve his dream of playing jazz professionally has…
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

When an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a faithless director must conduct an exorcism to save his wife, the cast, and himself. (31 words) I've tried to combine the two loglines…
on When he killed himself, he left five letters to five people in his life giving each a special task which he believed would bring them happiness. These are their stories.

I agree. It would help if we know why he takes his life... a terminal illness might justify it, and if he had lived a long and fulfilling life, his letters would be worth their weight in happiness. But, yes,…
on When a princess’s sister, the queen, flees after freezing their village with her icy powers, the princess must find her sister to heal the village and rekindle their relationship – Frozen.

Hello Jo. This is my first attempt at a logline review, so I apologize in case I've overstepped. I have a couple of questions that could help me get a better sense of what's going on: 1. Why does the…