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After he sees his favorite world-famous musician at a concert, a failed writer meets her in his dreams, but he only has 6 hours before he wakes up to earn a kiss from her and convince her of him.
Love this angle, Odie. Thanks so much! Sorry for the late reply. I didn't see this notification before. I hope you're doing well, mate!
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
Sounds interesting! I like your story idea.
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
Interesting concept. Maybe he was also asked by his friend to participate, but refused because he was too scared. Either way, I like the story. You have something good here!
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When a lab accident makes him lose his sense of touch, a morally ambiguous top scientist must create a serum before he loses his other senses.
Agree with Mike. Working on a serum inside the lab all day is not going to be really interesting for an audience. You have to expand your story beyond that.
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When a series of unusual deaths occur in an uncharted region of Alaska, an aspiring detective must retain his lawful morality in a hidden barbaric world to seek those responsible.
You don't have to add a detailed description of the story below your logline. If we don't understand your premise based on your logline, your logline is not ready. Your logline has to stand on its own. Now to your…
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After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.
I like both loglines (Neer and dpg). Two totally different story directions though.
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One lonely Filipino seafarer in a cruise ship finds comfort to his roommate who saves money for his wedding but he unexpectedly falls for him, and as they sail together his feelings grow deeper until he’s force to reveal it.
I can see a concept, but I can't see a logline with the needed elements. Discovering your own identity can be part of your characters dramatic need. But you want him to have some kind of visual goal as well…
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In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.
Hey darkhorse, Sounds for me like a comedy concept. Like you said previously, it could be fun to watch as a sitcom. However, I agree with dpg and riechiev: him seducing his daughter seems more likely to upset the boss,…
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After his daughter who is a schoolteacher disappeared unexpectedly, a police officer has 3 hours to stop terrorists from blowing up the U.S. Capitol building.
What's the ultimate goal of your main character (police officer)? Rescuing his daughter? Stopping the terrorists? Rescuing himself after the robbery?
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two years after Selina was gone she meets Thomas again, who has to try everything to get her out of depression and win her heart
This is barely a coherent logline. Selina and Thomas tell us little about your lead characters. I would guess there are a few Thomas and Selinas out there in the world ;) So try describing your characters in a more…
