Simon Rintel

Penpusher · 50 points

250 points to Logliner

on [Logline Omitted]

Ah you got me there - it's not the title - I hesitate to give the title - I've finished my 2nd draft of the 110 page script - registered it etc - but just putting the feelers out there…
on After fighting in WWII, a man returns home to his family. However, suffering from PTSD, he doesn’t know how to live a normal life and only uses his piano to cope with his problems until he meets a woman who shows him how to be happy.

I think Nicholasandrewhalls has tightened this one up nicely with both of his suggested loglines above - as he states depending on the angle that is required. I prefer the second one - while being happy is all we really…
on A straight-laced rookie goes undercover to catch a gang of free-running thieves, but falls in love with their charismatic leader.

An Ok Logline - the L word could be taken out - simply falls is enough & more info is needed - we can assume that makes things tricky but what is then at stake, where is the drama is…

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