SirByron

Penpusher · 35 points

265 points to Logliner

1 logline
1 review

As famine rages, a sharecropper makes a bargain with the landowner for food in exchange of his attractive wife, but the landowner, who is the Devil testing Man’s Soul, also wants his innocent 14 year old daughter.

September 7, 2012

on A young mineworker with considerable magical powers, yearning for a better life, manages to gain an apprenticeship with a dark group of wizards, and soon learns that finding personal happiness entails as many deadly perils as choosing sides in the struggles between power-hungry factions.

"finding personal happiness" is too abstract and not an "exploitable commercial element". It should be in the theme rather than in the logline.