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A trio of college students discovers street racing becoming deadly when they discover a racer was a serial killer.
I feel like the name of the story is key.
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Logline: A hardened cyber crimes analyst must shut down the source of a cursed smartphone app that seems to kill people who use it before the app strikes its next targets, her estranged family.
Well....it kills some users and not others. If you forward it to a friend you are spared. Would you say that qualifies as "an app that kills people who use it" for the purposes of the logline? It sounds better…
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Logline: A hardened cyber crimes analyst must shut down the source of a cursed smartphone app that seems to kill people who use it before the app strikes its next targets, her estranged family.
Hi Ninann, thanks for the feedback!
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A self-made businesswoman risks bankruptcy to complete her biggest real estate project, but everything depends on her persuading a single holdout–an eccentric maker of wind chimes–to sell his land.
Do they fall in love?
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After being permanently transformed into a penguin during an operation, a disgraced MI6 agent is offered redemption to spy on a villainous family by acting as their daughter’s newest adorable pet.
Love it. I actually laughed out loud. I think you could tighten it up on the back-end. Flesh out the villainous family. Maybe they are crime lords / drug dealers who use animal rights activism (or the world's largest online…
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“When a group of social justice ANTIFA wannabe’s attack his retirement community, a legendary retired hitman and his old mob buddies show the young punks, they messed with the wrong town.”
I might change the word "attack" to "occupy" or "seize control" of his retirement community.
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After accidentally causing the death of her boss, an over-worked, guilt-ridden barmaid must avoid suspicion, while at the same deflecting the advances of her lascivious co-worker
After accidentally serving her boss arsenic....
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Three interwined stories between a group of astronauts in space finding them race against time to find their way home to Earth.
Are there other anthology space films? I can't think of one. What does it compare to? Something like Cloud Atlas perhaps, where all the stories share a common thread?
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A murdered ex-con is resurrected and blessed with the power to heal. He must learn to be a saint when others would rather him be a sinner.
I think the original logline is pretty good - I agree that I want to hear who the "other" are. My go at it: "A murdered ex-con is resurrected and blessed with the power to heal. He must learn to…
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A witty young man resists showing affection, but when his old friend turns out to be in dire need, he must let his emotional guard down.
My take: "A witty comedian who fears showing his feelings must learn how to support an an old friend who is shattered by his daughter's cancer diagnosis." I changed it from losing an old woman to losing a young woman,…
