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When women are refused jobs at the city’s largest company, a group of women must overcome backward attitudes, language barriers, poverty and tradition to ignite a community battle from the factory gates to the highest courts, for equality.

March 24, 2015
When a biochemical corporation manufactures implants that help millions live longer, they go from pariah to savior. But a longstanding critic remains unconvinced, and must battle the corporation and its backers to uncover the shocking secret behind the technology.

March 16, 2013
In a near future where nothing is safe from corporate logos, a burnt out advertising worker rebels when his company markets his new born child.

March 5, 2013
Desperate to be free of his well meaning but molly-coddling family, a fiesty free-spirited granddad fakes his own death – with unintended consequences.

March 5, 2013

on When women are refused jobs at the city’s largest company, a group of women must overcome backward attitudes, language barriers, poverty and tradition to ignite a community battle from the factory gates to the highest courts, for equality.

Thanks all for feedback. Indeed we are 'prosecuting' the idea! The project is in development, see www.JobsForWomenfilm.com A little background - it's a true story, that began in 1980 in Wollongong, Australia, where women were outright refused jobs by BHP,…
on ‘The only straight player on an all-gay football team is engaged to the daughter of a disapproving, homophobic dinosaur. With his team aiming for the final, he struggles for his father-in-law’s blessing, who just so happens to be the league’s top referee’

Agree with the above. I'm sure there are all-gay football teams (whatever the code), but can't think why there would be all-gay + one straight? Possibly more plausible would be an all-gay team with straight coach (similar to an all-women…
on A woman’s ghost appears to her husband to try and prevent his suicide and convince him to go on living. The longer she stays the less chance she has of entering heaven and the harder it is for him to move on.

How about: "With her grief ridden husband spiralling toward suicide, a recently dead woman has the chance for a ghostly return to convince him to go on - yet every minute she stays reduces her chance to enter heaven." The…
on A mute man is graced with the power to read minds. As he climbs the social ladder he struggles to work out his place in society.

The concept of a mute man who can read minds is a good one, combining a serious weakness/hurdle (being mute) with a power/gift - lots of potential with this set up. But the 2nd sentence is a bit nothing -…
on When a sailor’s young son is taken out to sea by ghosts on his father’s boat, the father struggles to get his son back after the superstitious townspeople refuse to be involved with a “haunted” boat.

Looks interesting - here is the same idea tweaked a little, in case it helps: "When ghosts commandeer his boat and take his young son, a sailor has until dawn to overcome superstitious townspeople and assemble a rescue team to…
on A woman who tries to raise her catatonic son on her own suddenly discovers a shocking secret about him.

....and then? This provides a dramatic set-up, but where does it go? We don't necessarily need to know what the shocking secret is, but we need to know that its discovery will compel certain action - "discovers a shocking secret…
on Two brothers, one an ex-con and the other a divorced father of two kids, face the foreclosure of their family’s West Texas farm. They team for a skillfully-calculated bank robbing spree that puts them on a collision course with two Texas Rangers determined to take them down.

A few thoughts on your idea: a) an 'ex-con' seems pretty stereotypical and unsurprising that they would rob a bank. It may work better with a less obvious teaming "a divorced father of two and his Buddhist sister....."? b) Why…
on With armageddon approaching, a museum security guard with a background in psychology must destroy the Egyptian god of chaos, who is disguising himself as various museum employees while committing a grisly string of murders.

Hi there - personally, I actually preferred some of the earlier attempts of this logline, where the focus was on the mysterious murders/deaths, the artifact, and the security guards role in trying to solve the mystery and save himself. When…
on When a biochemical corporation manufactures implants that help millions live longer, they go from pariah to savior. But a longstanding critic remains unconvinced, and must battle the corporation and its backers to uncover the shocking secret behind the technology.

Thanks all, as usual the feedback has greatly helped to clarify my thinking. I agree that the weakness of the original logline was not coming to the key conflict/story until the second sentence - the first sentence really gave backstory.…
on An eskimo with a thirst for human flesh accidentally steals the identity of a popular quiz show host, leading to a one-of-a-kind spectacle of blood, blubber, and cash prizes.

Gold. Pure gold. Anyone who kills, eats, and then impersonates a game show host has got me completely on side. The new host of course should get the highest ratings of all. Just get the Coen brothers to direct, and…