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When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

September 2, 2020
When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

August 28, 2020
To win the affections of the dean’s daughter, a bad boy rich kid has until graduation to get accepted into a snooty club, in order to prove his worth.

August 21, 2020
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When he learns his wife is planning to kill him, a rich man invites her secret lovers to a dinner party, and offers them each a fortune to kill her first.

July 10, 2020
In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.

June 29, 2020
After a health scare, a middle-aged widower decides to get back in the dating game for the first time in twenty years – but soon finds romance blossoming with his friend’s daughter.

June 22, 2020
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When a geek loner forms an unlikely friendship with the bad boy new kid, they set out to help each other get their dream date for prom – the two most popular girls in school.

June 7, 2020
The stag night before his wedding, a man is handcuffed to a stripper – who turns out to be wanted by cops, the mob, and her psychotic boyfriend.

May 31, 2020
A man is seduced into robbing his lover’s psychotic boyfriend, when he does, they go on the run – but soon question whether they can trust each other.

May 29, 2020
When a suicidal FBI agent is assigned to infiltrate a prison drug ring, his life is saved by two lifers and a bond forms, however, his new friendships soon thwart his mission.

May 8, 2020

on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

I'm giving this one a shot. If it goes nowhere - it's practice. It's experience. Now - bear in mind, I do agree with everything that you're saying. However - at the same time, one must always be mindful that...…
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Oh - and DEAD POET'S SOCIETY.
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Well listen... To play devil's advocate here - a lot of the films I just suggested were by Hollywood players. None of which had to pitch or query with a logline. Imagine Joe Nobody pitching HER or FORREST GUMP. (I…
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

FIGHT CLUB? AMERICAN PSYCHO?
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Out of curiosity - what about FORREST GUMP or BIG (I suppose Big would be trying to find the machine. But would you mention that in the logline?)
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Scratch MY BEST FRIEND'S WEDDING. That's more an action goal/outside/external objective. HER?
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Oh - MY BEST FRIEND'S WEDDING. MOONSTRUCK. Basically rom coms then?
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

The idea that you can use a subjective need as a goal as long as it's got a strong hook was from you. From this post... https://loglineit.com/logline/an-emotionally-stunted-apathetic-playboy-learns-to-grieve-his-fathers-death-and-appreciate-life-from-a-terminally-ill-woman-who-loves-life/ We mentioned HAROLD AND MAUDE and GROUNDHOG DAY. Potential examples - um, BEFORE…
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

DPG - Regarding persistence - as a writer yourself, you understand -- one person's opinion should never sway you. TBH - I've already done an outline using a past logline. All the loglines afterwards seem to be poking at it…
on Three outcast friends lead their town’s residents on a perilous journey to save them from terrorists who scheme to enslave their women for the sex trade

Hi Ben, This reminds me of RED DAWN. I think you just need to lean it out a bit and get it down to 25 words. Something like... When terrorists attack a small town, three childhood friends must help a…

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