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An arrogant tattoo artist sets off on a cross country journey to track his missing girlfriend only to unravel memories he is refusing to acknowledge.
For me - the profession is neither here nor there-- the issue is in the vagueness of the complication -- "...only to unravel memories he is refusing to acknowledge...". Without this being specified I don't really know what this is…
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Crashed on a faraway planet with retrograde amnesia, a young, ingenious but highly schizophrenic astronaut strives to rebuild her spacecraft while endeavoring to outwit a manipulative, shape-shifting alien whose sole impetus is to repopulate by abusing her as a host.
I kinda like the concept -- has touches of Alien/ The Thing/ Invasion of the body snatches/ even Contact (even Moon..)... Agree with the above that there are some logical issues and perhaps a bit too much going on (at…
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A mild-mannered but disgruntled teller leads a hostage revolt against his captors during a bank siege in order to get away with the stolen loot for himself.
A re-working of an old idea.
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A clever teenager hacks a military computer to play a nuclear war game only to trigger the computer into preparing to “play” a real nuclear war.
Prefer dpg's. Whilst following conventional logline form (formula tab..) is great for those new to the logline game, it can dance dangerously close to conformity and hence a one way ticket to snoresville. Yes, loglines need to be clear and…
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Desperate to repair and reunite his dysfunctional family, an idealistic young man brings them to an abandoned island mansion in an attempt to relive his nostalgic childhood vacations, only to discover it overrun by giant carnivorous slugs. (HORROR-COMEDY)
Cool. Pretty much ticks most boxes. My only issue is that id hope his family are bunch of aholes, as who else is going to be fodder for these monsterous slugs in da house? Good luck.
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When a redneck American world champion woodchopper is defeated by the ultimate bogan Australian newcomer, he travels to the land down under to face his nemesis and reclaim the title.
Sane=same
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When a redneck American world champion woodchopper is defeated by the ultimate bogan Australian newcomer, he travels to the land down under to face his nemesis and reclaim the title.
I also think this has a lot of promise. My only issue is that both protag and antag are the sane type of character (for non aussies, 'bogan' is australian slang for redneck..).. just an idea, but what if the…
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A man is held by unseen captives that thwart his every escape attempt. He discovers that they are his other personalities that have trying to stop his most violent personality escaping and killing again.
I'm not sold on the whole multiple personality thing (very reminiscent of Donald Kaufman's screenplay 'The Three' in Adaptation... in the film this pitch was supposed to be a joke because of both its cliche and unbelievability...) I think if…
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Share your thoughts or advice on this logline: Faced with bankruptcy, a down-on-luck man goes through a spine-chilling experience to get money to pay for his son’s emergency operation.
We need to know specifically what the spine-chilling experience is...
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A Shakespearian actor becomes unable to tell reality from a play. When his character Mercutio dies he wanders through what he believes is the afterlife distressing his family and friends.
Title : A grave man
"Do you have any tips on how to do this? Like a rule or something that could be useful to keep in mind?" I'm probably just doubling up on what Nir and others have said, but: Specifically define the OBJECTIVE…
