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After their house mysteriously burns down, killing their friend, two potheads start selling weed in present day Indiana to make ends meet, only find their supplier is a psychopath.
Hi Skieege, Making ends meet is generic. Try and find the unique goal of your story and highlight it. Why is the supplier a psychopath? Hope this helps :)
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Derek Caplin is a nobody. He spends his whole life as a nobody, but he is going to change that. Fleeing to the past, he alters his past self for what he believes is the better, however, when he returns to the future he sees his last self has grown up to be a warlord. With the World on a tipping point, Derek must turn to those who originally tried to stop him for help.
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Derek Chaplin tries to alter his past to give himself a second chance, but when he sees the future his ‘new self’ will create he must now stop at nothing to stop a horrible, deadly future from ever happening.
Hi Knightrider1984, There is a great section on the site that will help you with writing a logline: https://loglineit.com/howto/ Once you deconstruct the story elements into it's most basic form, you will then find it easier to work with and…
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When the nation of Japan researches the cause of it’s constant tsunamis — it awakens Godzilla, deep in the Pacific, who arises and establishes an authoritarian rule over it’s country as it’s citizens build it a throne and serve it as their God leading to a cult-like religious following and the third world war with catastrophic nuclear consequences.
Hi Caleb, Godzilla is a registered character and I would suggest creating you own kaiju for the purpose of the story. If the Godzilla character could communicate, I would suggest using it in the logline. "Awoken from the depths of…
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Young William Randolph Hearst goes to war against an ageing Joseph Pulitzer as each tries to monopolize coverage of a mysterious homicide capturing New York’s imagination, birthing the modern concept of sensationalist media coverage.
PROS - A unique story. - Clear goal. CONS - Passive protagonist elements. The real story would be better perceived from the murderer's P.O.V. - High budget/period piece. With a few more re-writes, the writer could have addressed the underlying…
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Following the outbreak of a virus that wipes out the majority of the human population, a teen documents her family’s new life in quarantine and tries to protect her infected sister.
PROS - Strong visual event. - Impending confrontation with close relationship. CONS - Doesn't clearly specify use of found footage element. - Lack of specific goal other than to survive. The writer demonstrates an innate ability to deliver the story…
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When a village is plagued by beetles that eat colour, an artist grieving the loss of his daughter ventures into the nearby jungle to save a flower which is the only source of a certain shade of blue.
I love this dude, well done. I hope one day I can see this.
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When a single father to a teenage daughter learns that he has a fatal brain tumor, he takes her on a road trip to find the mother who abandoned her years before and to try to teach her everything she might need over the rest of her life.
Heysa everyone! Just so you understand, the logline is an example taken from "The Black List" which you can find over at http://blcklst.com/. It's a useful tool to compare what you are writing to what is selling/hot.
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After moving into a new apartment, a famous writer sets up various cameras to spy on his strange neighbour.
Heysa everyone, Thanks for the feedback it has been really helpful. :D
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After moving into a new apartment, a famous writer sets up various cameras to spy on his strange neighbour.
Like "The Blair Witch Project", "Paranormal Activity" and "Chronicle".
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After moving into a new apartment, a famous writer sets up various cameras to spy on his strange neighbour.
Its a found footage take on those movies and is included in the logline "... sets up various cameras...".
