Valentin

Mentor · 3,580 points

6,420 points to Overlord

7 loglines
239 reviews

When her pleas for help are dismissed by her British Intelligence handler, a former black ops soldier must chase alone across London the cunning foreign operative who kidnapped her delinquent kid brother.

August 8, 2014
Tasked to bring a little girl to a slaughter house, an android who wants to be more human must decide between following his orders and deny himself emotions or experience emotions and kill his masters who are organising a genocide.

March 10, 2014
When trying to reconnect with his estranged father, the illegitimate son of a Russian Mafiosi learns that his unrepentant father ordered the hit that killed his mother. Unable to get justice by legal means, he build his own criminal empire to destroy his father.

February 20, 2014
When the best players of a intergalactic war computer game are hunted down by an alien bounty hunter, the survivors must band together to fight both on earth and in the game to win a very real space war. Tag Line: a war simulation so good, it’s real…

February 17, 2014
An amnesic secret service agent of Arab origin must recover his memory to clear his name and stop his terrorist brother from detonating a dirty bomb on US soil.

February 16, 2014
After being rejected by his Italo-American mafioso father, a mixed race lawyer decides to exact revenge by building his own criminal empire and destroying his father’s.

January 26, 2014
When a volcanic eruption grounds all flights, a desperate racing driver must evade highway patrolmen to transport his dying fiancé heart transplant.

January 26, 2014

on Through interference with dimensional aliens, several lost Roman legions is transported to a brutal world of magics, monsters, and hellish creatures and must fight to reshape the world in the name of Caesar and Rome.

I like the original concept of a Roman legion being zapped onto an alien world, however the logline is too jumbled to really convey the idea. One big thing missing from your logline is their goal, is it just survival,…
on Set in the near future: When his neighbourhood is raided by a violent vigilante squad, a gang-member must venture through enemy territory to get his 5 year old daughter to sanctuary before they are killed.

When his sanctuary compound is raided, a reformed gunslinger embarks on a journey to rescue his five years old daughter from slave merchants.
on Good logline?

Like suggested before, please?Follow the link Our Formula on the top of the page that will guide you on the expected format of a logline. What you describe is not a logline, but a situation or a resume of the…
on When a smash repair shop explodes, a declining Barrister must infringe his professional code by encouraging his son to restore justice by convincing a Court to set aside his own client’s acquittal.

I would throw a twist. Make the son the protagonist and a cop/FBI agent/prosecutor. ?Put him in the situation where he had to decide whether to use information revealed to him by the father during one of his alzheimer episodes.…
on Edit2 – When a man inherits his father’s fortune he is shot while he sleeps, he wakes to his final day on earth rewinding around him and must figure out who shot him before he bleeds to death.

I agree with Paul except with having to know why he gets a second chance. In?Groundhog Day, we never learns why he was giving a second chance and nor does the audience cares. What is important is what he does…
on When a botched scientific experiment enables her to read minds, a reserved psychology student realises the intrusive burden of her ability and must discover how to reverse her gift to restore her normal life.

Sounds like a female version of Mel Gibson's character in?What Women Want. Is it intended as a comedy, drama, coming of age, medical thriller or pure SF? A better logline description of the experiment would be that it had unintended/unexpected…
on When the prison transfer bus crashes in a remote mountain forest, a rookie officer must use her training to tame the violent inmates as well as survive against dangerous wildlife and a harsh blizzard while they await rescue.

Yes, under normal circumstances the procedure is to hanker down, but there may be exceptional circumstances. prison may have been due to close down and evacuation was planned before. Maybe the storm has changed direction. ?Prison may have lost power…
on When the prison transfer bus crashes in a remote mountain forest, a rookie officer must use her training to tame the violent inmates as well as survive against dangerous wildlife and a harsh blizzard while they await rescue.

I kind of agree that you are really throwing the kitchen sink and then some to the poor woman. However I like the concept even if it sound so over the top. It reminds me of the movie? The Grey.…
on When a SS General’s daughter falls in love with a Jewish boy in a concentration camp, they must stand out together to get back his family and help the Jews escape from the Germans.

Why not go full throttle and switch from daughter to wife. Because of Who she was married to, she can manipulate the soldier within the camp.When the unhappy wife of the warden of a SS Concentration camp recognises one of…
on When a Barrister with early onset Alzheimers obtains a mysterious brief, he must break his professional code to restore justice by convincing a Court to set aside his own client’s acquittal.

When the guilty terrorist he helped getting acquitted starts a new campaign of terror, a lawyer with early onset of Alzeihmer must break professional code to help his prosecutor son convicts his client.