Wayne

Samurai · 710 points

1,790 points to Mentor

16 loglines
38 reviews

When he learns that the woman he yearns for has the same destructive personality disorder as his psychologist’s wife, an emotionally-battered man teams with the psychologist, who helps him implement a new and bizarre approach to fixing the on-off relationship.

March 27, 2019
When a depressed maintenance worker discovers that the woman he loves has the same destructive personality disorder as his psychologist’s wife, he befriends the psychologist whose specific advice may help save his failing relationship.

March 18, 2019
An attention seeking YouTube prankster shames and bribes a violent scammer resulting in a battle beyond entertainment.

July 2, 2016
When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is assaulted and left financially debilitated, he uses his pranking skills to blackmail the crazy scammer, but must survive a dark murderous world where responsibility lacks in a similar way to his pranking.

June 21, 2016
When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed, he uses his pranking skills to blackmail a crazy car salesman, but enters a darker world of violence and murder.

June 21, 2016
When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed by a car salesman he enlists the salesman’s captivating assistant to help seek compensation but her unorthodox methods and pranking involvement becomes creepy.

June 14, 2016
When a flippant prankster is ripped off by crazy scammer he seeks compensation but inadvertently starts a relationship with the scammer’s even crazier assistant.

June 5, 2016
When a deaf surfer is clawed by a cat he begins to obsessively stalk the cat’s owner

March 8, 2016
When seven year old Olive needs to get to a far away beauty pageant her family accompanies her on an arduous road trip.

March 2, 2016
When divorced businessman Mr Barton enquires about a hotel’s pay TV service he becomes frustrated by an annoying receptionist with an obsession for popcorn and the Adult Channel.

January 10, 2016

on TITLE: A Psycho In The Cockpit. LOGLINE: A psycho in the cockpit. STORY IS ABOUT: A Psycho in the cockpit.

That's not a logline, it's a TAGLINE, but a good one! :)
on After getting injected with a rage serum, the injected man must use his new found abilities to stop a rich vengeful businessman from flooding the streets with his serum to destroy the city.

Both characters seem pretty angry? a bit same same.? I guess it's good for a hero to mirror the villain, but I don't really understand the hero's motivation.
on Tired of being his 24/7 gopher, a workaholic lawyer gives her playboy boss two weeks notice only to fall in love with him while finding her replacement.

Re the long version: Why would a lawyer care about a community centre?? Doesn't seem like high stakes. Re the short version:? Is confusing as to WHO will find her replacement.
on When he learns that the woman he yearns for has the same destructive personality disorder as his psychologist’s wife, an emotionally-battered man teams with the psychologist, who helps him implement a new and bizarre approach to fixing the on-off relationship.

A new attempt.? Any more comments greatly appreciated: When he learns that the woman he yearns for has the same destructive personality disorder as his friend's wife, an emotionally-battered man teams with his friend, who helps him implement a new…
on When a depressed maintenance worker discovers that the woman he loves has the same destructive personality disorder as his psychologist’s wife, he befriends the psychologist whose specific advice may help save his failing relationship.

Thanks for the feedback.? It's much appreciated, as would any more comments on this update: When he learns that the woman he yearns for has the same destructive personality disorder as his psychologist's wife, an emotionally-battered man teams with the…
on After naively inviting her daughter’s various ‘godfathers’, a mafia overlord must prevent her wedding from becoming a gang war

I like it!? Appears like it would be a script with lots of opportunity for conflict and comedy.? Maybe you could state the overlord's flaw - this might give us more insight into the genre and theme
on When a city council decides to impound all stray animals, a selfish ex-house cat seeks refuge with a family of street cats, but to earn his place, he must learn to put others first and outsmart the Feline Mafia henchman that stands between the street cats and the new home that will save them all.

Sounds like an interesting concept - and an interesting main character - typical of a cat to be selfish! The name "street cats" is a little confusing.? If they are street cats, why do they live in a home? To…
on A racially prejudices cricket fan about to lose the family hotel goes back in time with his prospective Indian son in law and must overcome his prejudices if he is to get back to his own time and save the pub.

"Racially prejudiced"? is the same as "racist", so you could cut out one word there.? And If he's racist, I can't imagine he'd have many viewers on his side.? Maybe his flaw could be about cricket prejudice or hotel prejudice,…
on Selfish athlete learns the importance of humility when he falls for a single mom while rehabbing an injury as his team makes playoff push.

What's the single mom's trait that teaches him humility.? That seems missing in the logline. Also what's a playoff?? Just kidding.? But if you are marketing to chick flick fans or Aussies like me who don't do playoffs, it's a…
on Clumsy kid learns to dance to stand up to bully and impress bully’s ex-girlfriend at school dance.

It would be better if you made it clear WHY he wants to impress the bully's ex girlfriend.