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A young man in the quaint town of Ravens Circle must confront his deepest fears to uncover the eerie secrets that bind him to the malevolent force terrorizing his community before it consumes everything he holds dear.
Thank you for the review and advice Vexmeister.
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She has a bright future, but when her boyfriend gets caught up in an experiment with murderous implications, she must find him, survive his brainwashed mind, and do whatever it takes to bring him home.
Thank you for your comments. Here is my new version: When her boyfriend is forced to participate in an experiment that trains him to kill, a perfect student must abandon school to find him and save him before he kills…
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A relentless Class President investigates the disappearances of fellow female students only to find out a once beloved Teacher holds them captive, unable to prove him guilty to the Police she is forced to use herself as bait to lure him into a trap.
I changed it to: "..., unable to prove him guilty to the police she is forced to use herself as bait to lure him into a trap. She would like to inform the Police, but she is unable to because…
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A persistent class president investigates the disappearances of multiple female students when she discovers the truth behind an admired teacher who, since the death of his family, has kept the students captive, she manipulates him into a trap that leads her to the missing students.
You are right Richiev.?The story is more about her investigation of the missing students. I would like for her to enact revenge but it is not a main plot point to the whole story. Again, thank you for your help.…
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A persistent class president investigates the disappearances of multiple female students when she discovers the truth behind an admired teacher who, since the death of his family, has kept the students captive, she manipulates him into a trap that leads her to the missing students.
Thank you Richiev?for your advice. I appreciate it. How about this, does it work better? A persistent class president sets out to uncover the truth about a once adored teacher who since the death of his entire family has kidnapped…
