YaelEinstein
Penpusher · 185 points
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Yes. It’s a game, not a film.
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Is this a bit like Disturbia when the protagonist suspects that the person is a killer but has no evidence and no one believes them? Also, I don’t think the word whistleblower fits in this situation, because alerting people to…
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I like the ex-boyfriend addition. It makes the conflict more personal. How about: When a young chef loses a catering job because her ex-fiancé stole her signature dish, she must create a new Michelin star-worthy dish before both their restaurants…
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Good point. How about this: When an NPC becomes sentient in the middle of a dating sim, she must hack into the game code to divert the attention of the real-life game player away from the other romantic interests before…
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Good point about the use of accurate terms. It is an existing story but I didn’t include the title because it’s part of the spoilers.
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This type of situation sounds like one that Jacinda Ardern would be smashing at. She would make the best movie hero.
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This sounds adorable! I agree with Scott that the goal of finding the motive for the kidnapping seems odd, would make more sense to find the kitten and the kidnapper. The stakes are great, especially for a family film. I…
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Yes, definitely lacking stakes. The stakes could come from a bet that she’s made with her rival to make more money or gain more restaurant stars or something similar. And her unique methods may help her win the bet but…
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Good point. The question is whether she is imagining the codes and (her struggles to adjust to a “normal†life post war is driving her to imagine that she is still part of some great mission) or whether the codes…
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I do like how the stakes are pretty clear without you having to specify them, as the risks of a black man during times of slavery are evident. Just the wording could be clearer. Does he travel back in time…