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On the verge of winning the grand prize on a popular Indian quiz show, an uneducated young man from the slums must convince the police he’s not cheating to stay on for the final question.
All good points. I am totally with you that here on Logline It, we should aim to write loglines as if the movie had not been made yet, i. e. we need to convince the reader 1) that there is a story and 2) that we understand how to develop this story structurally. I somewhat agree on the cultural anglRead more
All good points.
I am totally with you that here on Logline It, we should aim to write loglines as if the movie had not been made yet, i. e. we need to convince the reader 1) that there is a story and 2) that we understand how to develop this story structurally.
I somewhat agree on the cultural angle, although the core drama would have worked in any culture IMO.
The way the love story is incorporated is clumsy, I know. But I think that will always be difficult if we want to stay under 50 words…
As to the fabula/sujet (“syuzhet”??? 😉 ) that would be determined on a case-by-case basis. Sujet takes my preference, but it’s not always possible to do this coherently.
Thanks for you notes. Gold, as always!
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When a mother and her family are terrorized by their doppelgangers, she must...That's the general approach to loglining a film.? Start off with the protagonist, inciting incident and? story hook. .? In this case, the story hook is the doppelgangers.? ?So it's the lead.? Don't bury it at the end of tRead more
When a mother and her family are terrorized by their doppelgangers, she must…
That’s the general approach to loglining a film.? Start off with the protagonist, inciting incident and? story hook. .? In this case, the story hook is the doppelgangers.? ?So it’s the lead.? Don’t bury it at the end of the logline.
Also in a logline, the dramatic action should be framed in terms of what the protagonist proactively does.? This version leaves the protagonist (and her family) dangling in distress as hapless victims.? So what she must do?
See lessThe true story of how a motley group of investors defied conventional wisdom and made billions of dollars in the stock market crash of 2008.
henb:You make a good point about? "The true story of".? It can go, trimming the logline down to a leaner 21 words.The literal definition of the phrase "motley crew" is an apropo description of the investors.? The band Motley Crue came? to my mind when I was writing the logline; I deem that associatiRead more
henb:
You make a good point about? “The true story of”.? It can go, trimming the logline down to a leaner 21 words.
The literal definition of the phrase “motley crew” is an apropo description of the investors.? The band Motley Crue came? to my mind when I was writing the logline; I deem that association to be a feature, not a bug –? word play like that can enhance a logline.
A logline is not intended to be a plot summary.? ?First and foremost, it’s a marketing tool.? IMHO, it’s more effective for a logline to pitch the sizzle than to describe the steak.
The steak of “The Big Short” is this:? The investors unconventional strategy was to go short on mortgage backed securities while everyone else was going long.
And, of course, everyone knows the difference between going short and going long.? And everyone knows what a mortgage backed security is.? No explanation or clarification is needed.
As if!
Which is why I? focused on the sizzle.? You wanna to know more details about the steak?? Watch the movie.
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