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  1. Posted: April 16, 2018In: Examples

    In a world where humans are cloned to harvest their organs until they die, one clone struggles to postpone his fate.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on April 18, 2018 at 6:49 am

    variable;Good effort at? 22 words for a plot line that casts Kathy as the protagonist.But I respectfully see it differently.I think Kathy's defining character attribute is reticence .? It's a flaw that sabotages her desire to win Tommy's affection.? In contrast , her rival, Ruth, is aggressive,? notRead more

    variable;

    Good effort at? 22 words for a plot line that casts Kathy as the protagonist.

    But I respectfully see it differently.

    I think Kathy’s defining character attribute is reticence .? It’s a flaw that sabotages her desire to win Tommy’s affection.? In contrast , her rival, Ruth, is aggressive,? not shy about going for who she wants.? And by the end of Act 1 after she sees Ruth? boldy kiss Tommy,? Kathy resigns herself to having lost the contest for his heart (and other organs).

    And “realizing they are clones” is tricky.? I got the impression that the kids know they are “special”,? but they don’t fully comprehend what that means for their future.? Until 24 minutes into the 1st Act, when their guardian/teacher spells it out for them. (Which gets her fired.)

    I see Ruth as the proactive character in the “B” story.? Which is to say,? Ruth is the protagonist of the “B” story.? Because up until the bitter end of her life, she is in the driver’s seat of the “B” story.? (How much in the driver’s seat?? She’s the one who connives to reunite Kathy and Tommy before her dies.)

    So I don’t see Kathy as the protagonist.? Not in the “B” story, not in the “A” story .? Tommy is the protagonist of the “A” story.? Kathy is the POV/Narrator character.

    But, as we know, the logline is about the? “A” story thread — not the “B”? — and the character in the driver’s seat of that thread.? And in most films, the protagonist may drive? both story lines, so it’s a distinction without a difference.? But this film seems to be an exception.

    Hmm.? Now I’m? going to scan my database of films for other movies that might be exceptions to the rule.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: April 12, 2018In: Examples

    After the arrival of talkies, a declining star produces another silent film to prove his pride, while the rising career of an actress he loves keep them apart

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    Added an answer on April 13, 2018 at 7:21 am

    My take (but I think it's clunky):When the talkies arrive, a proud star's career sinks as he persists in making silent films while the career of his protege/girlfriend soars with sound. (25 words)Specifically, the silent star's objective goal is to make another silent movie even though everyone elseRead more

    My take (but I think it’s clunky):

    When the talkies arrive, a proud star’s career sinks as he persists in making silent films while the career of his protege/girlfriend soars with sound.
    (25 words)

    Specifically, the silent star’s objective goal is to make another silent movie even though everyone else has embraced talkies.?Artistically it may the right goal for him? because he doesn’t think he can make a go of it in talkies. (This is an echo of actual film history when many silent star’s careers ended because they just didn’t have the voice to make the transition to talkies.)

    So, in the 1st half of the 2nd Act he finances another silent film out of his own pocket.? But financially, of course, it’s the wrong objective goal.? The movie bombs (midpoint reversal) and in the 2nd half he loses everything and is abandoned by everyone while the love interest’s career soars higher and higher.

    BTW:? that’s how the systole and diastole of drama beats:? if the protagonist achieves his objective goal by the midpont, then it’s a “false victory” and/ or the wrong goal.

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  3. Posted: March 31, 2018In: Examples

    After failing in bed with his love interest, a simple railroad dispatcher joins the resistance during World War II to prove his manhood

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    Added an answer on April 12, 2018 at 11:00 pm

    variable: First of all, thanks for posting? a logline for this film.? It? was an inciting incident that got me to (finally) view the film,? check it off my? must-watch list. Here is my take: After a lowly railroad dispatcher fails in bed with his girl friend, he desperately seeks a way to prove hisRead more

    variable:

    First of all, thanks for posting? a logline for this film.? It? was an inciting incident that got me to (finally) view the film,? check it off my? must-watch list.

    Here is my take:

    After a lowly railroad dispatcher fails in bed with his girl friend, he desperately seeks a way to prove his manhood.
    (21 words)

    But, of course, this does do not justice to the film.? Nor can I think of a logline that does. The film simply does not conform to standard dramatic conventions in terms of how a plot is supposed to be laid out.? It is a product of its time, specifically the repressive political and cultural situation in Czechoslovkia during the Soviet occupation.

    (Spoiler alert)

    The film ends with an ironical punchline:? he finally finds a woman wit whom he can prove his manhood , sets a date for an encore performance with his girl friend — and then gets killed while carrying out another act of manhood, blowing up a train loaded with ammunition for the Nazi war effort.

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