1. Posted: March 10, 2018In:

    An out-for-himself and talented brain hacker, who sells off stolen ideas and concepts to large conglomerates, is hired to escort a scientist, who holds the key to clean energy in her head, to open source rebels so she can provide the idea free to all humanity.

    dpg Singularity

    >>? he must choose between betrayingIt is a good thing when a protagonist faces an authentic dramatic dilemma, one that hangs over the character like the sword of Damocles, that he must finally confront and resolve at the climax in the 3rd Act.?But a logline is about the external, objective coRead more

    >>? he must choose between betraying

    It is a good thing when a protagonist faces an authentic dramatic dilemma, one that hangs over the character like the sword of Damocles, that he must finally confront and resolve at the climax in the 3rd Act.?

    But a logline is about the external, objective conflict that occurs because of a decision the protagonist makes in the 1st Act.? It is not about deciding whether and when to decide because of a dilemma that engenders internal, subjective conflict that he won’t finally resolve until the 3rd Act.?

    And if it’s a dilemma that is raised by the inciting incident and after some debate and hesitation (standard issue beats, btw) and? resolved at the end of Act 1 by the choice he makes — well, the story as framed in the logline is over with.? He’s made his choice.? ?So obviously the plot is not and cannot be about deciding to decide:? it’s about the action that follow as a result of a decision made.

    Also loglines that frame the story in terms of a dilemma, a hard choice that has to eventually be made, are implicit spoilers.? Because they give away exactly what the protagonist will choose to do.? We know darn well that unless the protagonist is a? moral scumbag, he will later or sooner make the right choice: love and helping the disenfranchised.? (If he is an irredeemable moral scumbag, the script is DOA — nobody will want to film it, nobody will want to watch it.)?

    Framed as a choice to be made, there’s no suspense as to the outcome; the logline telegraphs the answer to the question it poses.? And a logline shouldn’t send telegrams.

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  2. Posted: March 9, 2018In:

    When a psycho is released on parole from prison, the cop that put him away races against time to stop from burning down the city, along with his girlfriend.

    Knightrider Mentor

    I feel like you could have fun with this. What If a copy cat starts just at the point the guy is released. At first the cop, obsessed won't believe him, but then they reluctantly work together and perhaps develop an understanding

    I feel like you could have fun with this. What If a copy cat starts just at the point the guy is released. At first the cop, obsessed won’t believe him, but then they reluctantly work together and perhaps develop an understanding

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  3. Posted: March 6, 2018In:

    A poor but athletic and mentally strong Sioux tribe heads to Manhattan to destroy a billion dollar hedgefund company in order to give back the land to ten thousands of native americans and american citizens who lost their houses during the financial crisis.

    Richiev Singularity

    Joseph Stalin once said, "When writing a logline, you kill one person, it's a tragedy, kill a million and it's a statistic" (I think he said that anyway) In a logline, it helps to put a face to the tragedy. It draws people into the story.

    Joseph Stalin once said, “When writing a logline, you kill one person, it’s a tragedy, kill a million and it’s a statistic” (I think he said that anyway)

    In a logline, it helps to put a face to the tragedy. It draws people into the story.

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