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When a deadly contagion is unleashed, a DC insider tries to maintain his humanity while dealing with worldwide chaos and wrestling with the dilemma: How far will you go to survive when everything you love is gone?
I can see where you are going with this but it needs to be more specific. I am assuming your DC insider is one of those slick lobbyist whose allegiance is to whoever pays them? Herein lies his flaw. State the dilemma clearly in your logline: he has to choose between maybe a wife who has left him, buRead more
I can see where you are going with this but it needs to be more specific.
I am assuming your DC insider is one of those slick lobbyist whose allegiance is to whoever pays them? Herein lies his flaw.
State the dilemma clearly in your logline: he has to choose between maybe a wife who has left him, but still loves him, or his client, a drug company that has a vaccine he can use but only if he will do this one dispicable thing.? You must give him an actionable goal. Maintaining his humanity is not a goal. Your second sentence: How far will you go etc. should be implied in the logline not stated in the logline.
Hope this gives you something to ponder.
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I guess I am going to have to start a new one on this -- it won't let me edit anymore -- just opens up a new submission form. I do value all of this feedback!!!! And am working diligently to improve!
I guess I am going to have to start a new one on this — it won’t let me edit anymore — just opens up a new submission form. I do value all of this feedback!!!! And am working diligently to improve!
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In future please post revisions of the same concept in the original thread. It's a better way to track the evolution of a concept, and provides a better overview of the comments already given. The fundamental logic at the base of this concept seems flawed. Once a person admits to being a terrorist tRead more
In future please post revisions of the same concept in the original thread. It’s a better way to track the evolution of a concept, and provides a better overview of the comments already given.
The fundamental logic at the base of this concept seems flawed.
Once a person admits to being a terrorist they lose all credibility, as such nothing they say can be trusted – cooperation of any kind is inexcusable.
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