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SHORT FILM: In a society where companions unite with a finger trap, a desperate man goes on the search for a partner. After a long struggle, he inserts his own finger into his trap, uniting with himself.
Thanks so much for the feedback Trix! Yeah I understand "a long struggle" is a little vague. Still trying to work out which shape or form this struggle takes palce. Basically his desperation is scaring people off. Yeah I am planning a qutie stylized almost cartooney style.
Thanks so much for the feedback Trix!
Yeah I understand “a long struggle” is a little vague. Still trying to work out which shape or form this struggle takes palce. Basically his desperation is scaring people off.
Yeah I am planning a qutie stylized almost cartooney style.
See lessA daughter and a father sits at a table. From chewing with her mouth open, to bad table manners to taking drugs right in front of him, the father does not realise anything because he is distracted by his phone.
Is this a short? If so, you should mention it in the comment section. (If it's not a short, then you have a problem as this will not hold the audience's attention for 90 minutes.) As this seems like a good subject matter for a short, I'll assume it is a short. Most shorts are structured like a jokeRead more
Is this a short? If so, you should mention it in the comment section. (If it’s not a short, then you have a problem as this will not hold the audience’s attention for 90 minutes.)
As this seems like a good subject matter for a short, I’ll assume it is a short. Most shorts are structured like a joke in that they have a setup followed by a punch. (In contrast to a joke, the punch in a short need not be funny, but could be sad or horrifying.) You don’t want to give away the punch. Your logline should be all about the setup. Try this for starters and see where you can take it:
When her father is too distracted by his iPhone to listen to the story of her science project, a ten year old girl resorts to ever more drastic measures to get his attention.
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>>They?re the last two people on Earth.That's the story hook and should be part of the logline.? Otherwise the premise doesn't make much sense and isn't very interesting.
>>They?re the last two people on Earth.
That’s the story hook and should be part of the logline.? Otherwise the premise doesn’t make much sense and isn’t very interesting.
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