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When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.
thedarkhorse, I'll give you points for persistence. This seems to be a story you not only want to tell, but that you MUST tell. Have you considered making the geek a girl? Out of desperation, he swallows his misplaced sense of pride to have her tutor him. She's only in it for the money -- she loatheRead more
thedarkhorse,
I’ll give you points for persistence. This seems to be a story you not only want to tell, but that you MUST tell.
Have you considered making the geek a girl? Out of desperation, he swallows his misplaced sense of pride to have her tutor him. She’s only in it for the money — she loathes about him. He needs the grades; she needs the money.
fwiw
See lessWhen his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
You've done several iterations of the core premise. What is the story hook embedded in all of them? More specifically, what hooks your interest? Why do you want to write a script based upon this premise? Why *must* you write a script based upon this premise?
You’ve done several iterations of the core premise. What is the story hook embedded in all of them?
More specifically, what hooks your interest? Why do you want to write a script based upon this premise? Why *must* you write a script based upon this premise?
See less17 year old twin, Deighton Young needs to negotiate his last year of school while grieving for his recently drowned brother. Dropping out of school due to grief he is forced by his father to work for white collar criminal Harry Mackay, in doing so he uncovers unethical business practice leading back to resolving a multi-generational mystery surrounding the disappearance of Lani Drum 40 years earlier.
It seems a little too wordy. You could change it to something like: 17-year-old, Deighton Young drops out of school and forced to work for white-collar criminal Harry Mackay. He uncovers sketchy things related to the Lani Drum disappearance and the multi-generation mystery surrounding it. That's notRead more
It seems a little too wordy.
You could change it to something like:
17-year-old, Deighton Young drops out of school and forced to work for white-collar criminal Harry Mackay. He uncovers sketchy things related to the Lani Drum disappearance and the multi-generation mystery surrounding it.
That’s not the best, but it gets the point across quicker, more concise, and leaves the audience hooked.
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