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  1. Posted: July 26, 2021In: Crime

    A young boy is taken away from his father, His mom takes him across the country, and cuts off his relationship with his father. He gets raped by his mother, and he is trapped in the attic all by himself he must find a way to escape.

    Odie Samurai
    Added an answer on July 27, 2021 at 5:17 am

    Consider the following: What is the psychology of this mother that forces her to kidnap her son? What’s her destination and goal? What must the father do to save his son? Take care.

    Consider the following:
    What is the psychology of this mother that forces her to kidnap her son? What’s her destination and goal? What must the father do to save his son?

    Take care.

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  2. Posted: July 25, 2021In: Crime

    When a young boy is taken away from his father, and starts to get raped by his mother, he must find a way to escape.

    Nordic12 Penpusher
    Added an answer on July 26, 2021 at 9:48 am

    It reads like an opening line or a teaser not a complete logline. Also delete"When" and start with"A" and delete "starts to get raped" and insert "gets raped" to tighten it up and make the action more immediate

    It reads like an opening line or a teaser not a complete logline. Also delete”When” and start with”A” and delete “starts to get raped” and insert “gets raped” to tighten it up and make the action more immediate

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  3. Posted: July 25, 2021In: Crime

    When a young boy is taken away from his father, and starts to get raped by his mother, he must find a way to escape.

    Nordic12 Penpusher
    Added an answer on July 26, 2021 at 9:17 am

    I see an event described but not an entire story. It reads like an opening line or a teaser, not a logline. Also I would drop "starts to get raped" and put in "gets raped" and drop "When" and start with "A " to tighten it up and make the action more immediate.

    I see an event described but not an entire story. It reads like an opening line or a teaser, not a logline. Also I would drop “starts to get raped” and put in “gets raped” and drop “When” and start with “A ” to tighten it up and make the action more immediate.

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