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When a former contender turned getaway driver finds love and tries to go legit, an Aryan Brotherhood kingpin who once derailed his boxing career threatens the mother of his unborn child to make him do one last job ? one that comes with the ultimate price.
The trouble with the logline attempts you have been posting is that you spend most the logline on back story an not enough word count on what the lead character must do now that he finds himself in this situation. What's the lead characters plan to get himself out of the situation. It doesn't have tRead more
The trouble with the logline attempts you have been posting is that you spend most the logline on back story an not enough word count on what the lead character must do now that he finds himself in this situation.
What’s the lead characters plan to get himself out of the situation. It doesn’t have to work, it could fail but you should tell us what the lead character must do, not just why the lead is in the situation he is in.
See lessWhen a former contender turned getaway driver finds love and tries to go legit, an Aryan Brotherhood kingpin who once derailed his boxing career threatens the mother of his unborn child to make him do one last job ? one that comes with the ultimate price.
The logline above is the latest one, posted ?when I was trying to edit the previous one shown here below for comparison:?To save his family from an Aryan Brotherhood kingpin who once derailed his boxing career, a former contender turned getaway driver must do one last job ? even if it comes with theRead more
The logline above is the latest one, posted ?when I was trying to edit the previous one shown here below for comparison:
?To save his family from an Aryan Brotherhood kingpin who once derailed his boxing career, a former contender turned getaway driver must do one last job ? even if it comes with the ultimate price.?
See less?A once-promising former boxer turns to highline crime to provide for his cancer-stricken mother. But when an Aryan Brotherhood kingpin threatens to kill her and the mother of his unborn child, he must find a way out while keeping his family safe.
What Richiev said. ? Loglines are only about the main "A" story moving forward from the inciting incident.I get it that you're trying to cast a character who makes a bad choice (dealing drugs) with the best of ?intentions (pay for his mom's medical expenses). ?He's not such a bad guy, just a flawedRead more
What Richiev said. ? Loglines are only about the main “A” story moving forward from the inciting incident.
I get it that you’re trying to cast a character who makes a bad choice (dealing drugs) with the best of ?intentions (pay for his mom’s medical expenses). ?He’s not such a bad guy, just a flawed one.
?But that’s all in the back story before the plot of the film begins. ?Which means it doesn’t belong in a logline because a logline is only concerned about the plot moving forward, not the backstory looking backwards.
And now he’s trying to get out, go straight ?Why NOW? ? What does his wanting to quit have to do with the kingpin wanting him killed? ?What’s the causal connection? ?Is he trying to get because the kingpin wants him killed? Or is the kingpin out to kill him because he wants to get out of the business?
?Or is it something else that incites the kingpin to want to kill him? ?What’s the real inciting incident? ?For the purpose of a logline (and plot) whatever starts the fight to the finish with the kingpin — that’s the inciting incident. ?Everything else is backstory and prologue.
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