1. Posted: November 2, 2022In:

    “The truth hurts. But sometimes it’s inspirational, scary, sad, funny or anywhere in between. After witnessing the physical and spiritual persecution of humanity, a thirty year old man gradually teams up with others to liberate the earth by combating the sinister forces of darkness.”

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Presario2200, Here's how I see it: "A zealous thirty-year-old man must team up with others to liberate the earth from the sinister forces of darkness that are persecuting humankind physically and spiritually.” I hope this helps Good Luck Ben

    Hi Presario2200,

    Here’s how I see it:

    “A zealous thirty-year-old man must team up with others to liberate the earth from the sinister forces of darkness that are persecuting humankind physically and spiritually.”

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

    Ben

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  2. Posted: August 24, 2020In:

    The Man Who Invented Scalper Bots Changes Into the Master of the Fan Jedi Order.

    Richiev Singularity

    In a story, you have; 1: A lead character 2: Who has a goal 3: And something stands in the way of that goal. You have a lead character, But you don't have the other two elements in your logline. The goal of the lead character should be their driving force. The goal should mean the entire world to thRead more

    In a story, you have;
    1: A lead character
    2: Who has a goal
    3: And something stands in the way of that goal.

    You have a lead character,
    But you don’t have the other two elements in your logline.

    The goal of the lead character should be their driving force. The goal should mean the entire world to that lead character.

    I have no idea what your lead character wants,
    I have no idea what is standing in your lead characters way

    In order to make this logline more compelling you should add those two elements to the logline.

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  3. Posted: June 16, 2020In:

    When charismatic Russian politician Boris Nemtsov, is brutally murdered in Moscow, the American documentary filmmaker, is propelled on a dangerous search for the truth. Along the way she faces the toughest choice of her life – to betray Boris and herself by extorting the truth or go to the end no matter what.

    dpg Singularity

    >>>by extorting the truth ???  What is that supposed to mean?  The last sentence is confusing; I don't know what to make of it. What is the focus of the documentary?  On the controversial life and mysterious death of Nemzow? Or the perilous search for evidence to prove who was ultimately beRead more

    >>>by extorting the truth

    ???  What is that supposed to mean?  The last sentence is confusing; I don’t know what to make of it.

    What is the focus of the documentary?  On the controversial life and mysterious death of Nemzow? Or the perilous search for evidence to prove who was ultimately behind his assassination. (Putin?)

    Several documentaries have already been done on Nemzow.  Why is there a need for another documentary? What makes this one different?

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