1. Posted: September 24, 2019In:

    When mining pollutes the water table and the mine closes, a local outback town is left without employment. A local teenage rebel attempts to save the town by setting up a renewable energy company and entice the ?ornery locals to learn a new way of living.

    kpetrakis01 Logliner

    There's a similar movie based in AFrica where a kid uses the education he could get to design a 'dam' to help his drought village use the water for the plants. I see a similar theme here where a kid uses knowledge? Ideas? Returns from uni? to install solar light or wind farm? And train people in theRead more

    There’s a similar movie based in AFrica where a kid uses the education he could get to design a ‘dam’ to help his drought village use the water for the plants. I see a similar theme here where a kid uses knowledge? Ideas? Returns from uni? to install solar light or wind farm? And train people in the town skills in building, maintaining, marketing? this before the town dies or they lose hope.

    I like the sentiment of the idea, but I guess start thinking about what is the renewable energy, how does he /she go about it. Maybe it’s a group of uni students who return to help out.? Or a teenager whose idea won a contest and the greatest obstacle is the resistance to change?

    Defnitely something to work with here – maybe with more details, the logline will be able to work itself out.

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  2. Posted: August 26, 2019In:

    An idealistic young couple travelling by train on their honeymoon encounter a cynical elderly couple who turn out to be them in later life.

    Ariel Labraga Penpusher

    Genial!!! Perfecta historia y enganche!!!!

    Genial!!! Perfecta historia y enganche!!!!

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  3. Posted: September 20, 2019In:

    When he wins a basketball championship, a young man suffers an accident becoming paraplegic and must accept his new status in an adapted basketball club before falling into depression.

    dpg Singularity

    I think the logline needs to be clearer and more specific on some elements."Basketball championship" and"Young man": Is he a high school or college athlete?Did the accident occur during the championship game or afterwards?? And if the latter, what happened? Was he involved in an auto accident?? Or..Read more

    I think the logline needs to be clearer and more specific on some elements.

    “Basketball championship” and”Young man”: Is he a high school or college athlete?

    Did the accident occur during the championship game or afterwards?? And if the latter, what happened? Was he involved in an auto accident?? Or…?

    Film is a visual medium.? Ever plot element in a logline must be concrete, must map to something that can be seen on the? screen?? What’s the visual for “must accept”?? What is the concrete, screen event that will signal to the audience that he has “accepted his new status”?

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