1. Posted: July 30, 2022In:

    A ruthlessly funny social media maven stoops to manipulating her boss’ friends and family online. But when she falls for his idealistic son, she must fight to buy back her soul.

    sabrown Penpusher

    I like the premise but I wonder what you mean by punching and buy back her soul.

    I like the premise but I wonder what you mean by punching and buy back her soul.

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  2. Posted: July 29, 2022In:

    A woman decides to record events of her friend’s sexual relationship with her deaf mute younger sister.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi IvyEight6, Ok, a woman decides to record those sexual events: Why? To achieve what? Why does she have to do that? How is she going to do that? What is stopping her? To me, your logline has to include selling points. I hope this helps.

    Hi IvyEight6,
    Ok, a woman decides to record those sexual events:

    Why?
    To achieve what?
    Why does she have to do that?
    How is she going to do that?
    What is stopping her?

    To me, your logline has to include selling points.

    I hope this helps.

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  3. Posted: July 25, 2022In:

    A young widow struggles with the consequences of killing her rapist in a post apocalyptic world.

    Richiev Singularity

    I am not a big fan of the world 'struggles' Also, you might give us a hint of what the consequences of killing the man are. Other than that, the story sounds intriguing and that is half the battle! So overall, not bad. --- "When she kills the man who raped her, a young widow goes on the run in a posRead more

    I am not a big fan of the world ‘struggles’
    Also, you might give us a hint of what the consequences of killing the man are.
    Other than that, the story sounds intriguing and that is half the battle!
    So overall, not bad.
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    “When she kills the man who raped her, a young widow goes on the run in a post-apocalyptic wasteland, when his vicious clan seeks revenge.”

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