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Two teenagers debate their philosophical views – with quarterstaves. But theur philosophical views are not the only things at stake; their friendship is, too.atv
Hi, assaf, Again, I have difficulty understanding quarterstaves/quarterstaff. Are you talking about the weapon used in Europe during the middle ages? Are you trying to say: Two teenagers argue over their philosophical views/beliefs? What is the relationship between their philosophical views/beliefsRead more
Hi, assaf,
Again, I have difficulty understanding quarterstaves/quarterstaff. Are you talking about the weapon used in Europe during the middle ages? Are you trying to say: Two teenagers argue over their philosophical views/beliefs? What is the relationship between their philosophical views/beliefs and quarterstaves/quarterstaff?
May I suggest you write your logline without using metaphors, idioms, etc? Write it as if you are telling your logline to a 5-year-old kid. Straight forward black and white. Write it down, share it here and we will help beautify it AFTER we understand what it is that you are trying to relay.
I hope this helps.
See less‘It’s just one of those jobs you never get round to’ replies a man at a police station when he hands in a lost wallet after twenty years. A soccer referee rekindles her pursuit of diamonds stolen by her father when the wallet reappears. Attain her goal or surrender to gaol?
A logline is a one-sentence summary of the plot. Your logline attempt is more of a scene than a plot. I would also avoid questions in a logline. "When her father's wallet reappears, a soccer referee rekindles her search for the diamonds he stole." You might also want to add something about who or whRead more
A logline is a one-sentence summary of the plot.
Your logline attempt is more of a scene than a plot.
I would also avoid questions in a logline.
“When her father’s wallet reappears, a soccer referee rekindles her search for the diamonds he stole.”
You might also want to add something about who or what is standing in the way of the lead character’s goal.
See lessIn an effort to win souls, a street preacher must convince two boys to walk the literal narrow and difficult path to salvation.
Hi Assaf, is this closer to what you are aiming for? In an effort to increase his disciples, an evangelist preacher must convince two boys to walk the literal narrow and difficult path to salvation. Now, how else can you say this? "walk the literal narrow and difficult path to salvation" re-write anRead more
Hi Assaf,
is this closer to what you are aiming for?
In an effort to increase his disciples, an evangelist preacher must convince two boys to walk the literal narrow and difficult path to salvation.
Now, how else can you say this? “walk the literal narrow and difficult path to salvation”
re-write and we will see it then.
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