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Ramona, an introverted high school girl, unknowingly helps a disguised magical spirit, and in return is awakened to the inevitable destructive fate of her world. Ramona must flee her seemingly protected, privileged city and upbringing, to journey through an impoverished but enchanting land to reach the world’s one true saviour, who is to be found on top of a distant mountain.
>>>to reach the world’s one true saviour, who is to be found on top of a distant mountain. How will reaching the top of a distant mountain save her world? If this guy (or gal) is omnipotent enough to save her world, then isn't he/she also omniscient to know it needs saving? So why doesn't tRead more
>>>to reach the world’s one true saviour, who is to be found on top of a distant mountain.
How will reaching the top of a distant mountain save her world? If this guy (or gal) is omnipotent enough to save her world, then isn’t he/she also omniscient to know it needs saving? So why doesn’t the savior just do his/her job?
Also, it is ultimately the job of the protagonist to save her story world. But in this plot, she outsources her job to someone else.
See lessLelia is forced to leave her home and end an ongoing war in Heartland, or her own people will be brought to ruin.
OUTDATED LOGLINE: New Version Posted
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See lessWhen a visiting dignitary is murdered, the na?ve youngest prince of a fairy-tale kingdom becomes the Watson to a Holmes-like detective. But, when the detective is also killed, the prince must solve the mystery on his own before the situation escalates into all-out war.
Hi Todd, Sorry, I missed your MPR on my first read (not because it wasn't clear, just because I must have been only 1 coffee down that morning! LOL)... totally understandable for a longer logline with an MPR. ?Having said that, so far I still prefer your second logline (another thought I had with thRead more
Hi Todd,
Sorry, I missed your MPR on my first read (not because it wasn’t clear, just because I must have been only 1 coffee down that morning! LOL)… totally understandable for a longer logline with an MPR. ?Having said that, so far I still prefer your second logline (another thought I had with the first was that a Holmes character is going to understandably draw a lot of limelight and it’s hard to lose a main protagonist character half way through the film (not that it can’t be done, it’s just hard to do well).
I do prefer the princess to the prince 😉 and I really like the idea of them being betrothed… something neither of them probably want, but it’s being arranged to stop a war between both nations… and of course, if the princess has been vocal about her dislike of him (on account of her being naive to court politics) then she’s also likely to be a suspect…love that and there’s tonnes of conflict!
I’m still not getting the leap from his death to warring nations though… It doesn’t have to be obvious, but it should be clear and less of a guess I’m feeling. ?Playing with the addition of an MPR, how about something along the lines of:
A?wilful but na?ve fairy-tale princess must convince rulers to release her?from the arranged marriage intended to bring peace to?their feuding nations, but when her betrothed prince is murdered, she must clear her name and expose the real killer?before the situation escalates into all-out war.
It’s probably too long… but just playing with options before you whittle it down 😉
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