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After being discharged for unauthorized actions, the wolf soldier works as a security guard for a rich CEO until he is ordered to take down a terrorist group in his hometown hellbent on destroying the Queen.
What makes this mission personal for him? Hometown isn't enough, perhaps you could make it so a terrorist group threatens his parents/siblings/wife... this way the stakes are made immediately clear.
What makes this mission personal for him? Hometown isn’t enough, perhaps you could make it so a terrorist group threatens his parents/siblings/wife… this way the stakes are made immediately clear.
See lessAfter Mankind’s potential for good, The Son of the Devil, in defiance of his father, arrives in Los Angeles to send the supernatural creatures back to hell before they take over the city and find the hole in the Gateway before they take over the world.
What's LA got to do with it? If you're going to be specific about the location I feel like I want to understand why. You've got two goals - send them back to hell before they take over the city, find the hell portal and seal it before they take over the world. They are very similar (in a visual sensRead more
What’s LA got to do with it? If you’re going to be specific about the location I feel like I want to understand why.
You’ve got two goals – send them back to hell before they take over the city, find the hell portal and seal it before they take over the world. They are very similar (in a visual sense) so pick one and go with it.
I think dpg is saying that “supernatural creatures” could be more explicit. If you mean demons, say demons. If you mean vampires, ghouls, goblins, etc say that! The reader needs to be able to see it in their mind. Just cos you say demons in the logline doesn’t mean there can’t be other creatures in the screenplay BUT keep the logline simple and visual.
Richiev covered the Inciting Incident so I won’t mention that but I agree with him on all his points.
See lessFamine in rural Ireland forces a loving father to make a dark deal with a pagan spiritual entity to feed his family. When the bond is broken he must choose between losing his child or his soul to settle his debt.
giannisggeorgiou:Re:>>>what is the action that drives Act II?As far as I can tell, the deeds the farmer performs and the consequences that follow from the terms of the contract? he made with the devilish spirit.? For eventually he has a change of heart.? I take "when the bond is broken" toRead more
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>>>what is the action that drives Act II?
As far as I can tell, the deeds the farmer performs and the consequences that follow from the terms of the contract? he made with the devilish spirit.? For eventually he has a change of heart.? I take “when the bond is broken” to mean he stops performing his end of the deal.
It’s perfectly legitimate for a protagonist to make a wrong choice at the end of Act 1 and then have a change of heart later (either at the MPR? midpoint reversal) or end of Act 2.)? ?After which? the action and objective goal might shift into reverse gear.? (“Groundhog Day” is a good example.? In the 1st 1/2 of Act 2, Phil Connor’s objective goal is to exploit for personal gain and pleasure the fact that he’s time-trapped in?Punxsutawney, PA.? But after the MPR , his? objective goal and m.o. change: he uses the day to help others and learn new skills.)
Anyway, like you I would like a clarification of the pact the farmer has made.? What is he supposed to do to fulfill his end of the bargain?? Worship the devilish spirit?? Or…?
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