1. Posted: January 2, 2018In:

    When a medieval princess releases an evil spirit that intends to murder her husband, she must find a way to destroy the spirit and save her husband.

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    dpg Singularity

    I'm inclined to go with something like:Based on an ancient folk tale, when a medieval princess accidentally releases an evil spirit, she must find a way to destroy it before it kills her husband. (28 words)>>> Based on an ancient folk taleThe fact that it's a tale that's endured for centuriRead more

    I’m inclined to go with something like:

    Based on an ancient folk tale, when a medieval princess accidentally releases an evil spirit, she must find a way to destroy it before it kills her husband.
    (28 words)

    >>> Based on an ancient folk tale

    The fact that it’s a tale that’s endured for centuries suggests it has “commercial legs”; if it’s endured all this time, it might be a timeless (and profitable) story worth telling to a contemporary audience.

    >>accidentally

    It was accidental, right?? Or if she intentionally released it, she didn’t know what evil she was unleashing?Whatever, I suggest insert the appropriate adverb to clarify her lack of malevolent intent.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: December 31, 2017In:

    possible fiction-thriller “the quarry” (MITH)

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    dpg Singularity

    >>>3) the Sin: __________(that?s where I am confused)Implicit in Blake Snyder's description of the MITH trope is the notion that the monster fulfills the classic role of Nemesis, the retributive, pay back character/force/entity? for some original sin by the protagonist and/or? group to whicRead more

    >>>3) the Sin: __________(that?s where I am confused)

    Implicit in Blake Snyder’s description of the MITH trope is the notion that the monster fulfills the classic role of Nemesis, the retributive, pay back character/force/entity? for some original sin by the protagonist and/or? group to which he? is associated.? IOW, the manifestation of the? MITH in the plot is causal, not coincidental.? The cause lies in the backstory which the protagonist must eventually discover and deal with in order to defeat the MITH.

    Take the case of two of the very best MITH films: “Alien” and “Aliens”.? In both cases, the original sin is the Big Bad Corporation ‘s profit motive.? The willingness to intentionally put the lives of the protagonist (and crew) in jeopardy in order to? cash in on the Alien’s military potential, it’s unique offensive and defensive attributes.

    And in both movies, that’s the Big Discovery for Ripley, the moment when she realizes she’s being “fucked over for a goddamm percentage” of the profits.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: December 29, 2017In:

    “the sleight of hand”

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    variable Uberwriter

    thanks Knightrider for the punchline "magicians never reveal their secrets and this is their biggest one. It truly defogs the premise for me! thanks CraigDGriffiths for putting what I had in mind into the best possible logline! finally, thanks to Dkpough1 for making me aware of the missing goal! forRead more

    thanks Knightrider for the punchline “magicians never reveal their secrets and this is their biggest one. It truly defogs the premise for me!

    thanks CraigDGriffiths for putting what I had in mind into the best possible logline!

    finally, thanks to Dkpough1 for making me aware of the missing goal!
    for your kind efforts for the awesome link!! (Jin v/s Ray)

    the plot could be..
    AFTER his camera is turned into a magical weapon,
    Intrigued he decides to follow the street magician responsible for this anomaly,
    only to confirm his doubts
    And now he must face a small group of wizards who are too keen to reveal their biggest secret!!

    but I am still hung up on him being the active protagonist by giving him a choice and letting him DECIDE how himself to reveal their secret or else______________(don’t know the “stakes” and “debate section” yet)

    all of you got into my head (from such great distances) and unraveled a mess of plot
    awesome 🙂

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