1. Posted: August 31, 2017In:

    After a shape shifter saves the life of her best friend who was raped, she exposes herself to the village witch doctor who controls the village and is hellbent on destroying her.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have given us the set-up to your story, The story would be what she must do about it. ------------------------------------------------ "When she exposes herself to the village witch doctor after using her powers to save ?her best friend, a shape shifter must..." (Escape? Confront? Destroy?) ----Read more

    You have given us the set-up to your story, The story would be what she must do about it.
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    “When she exposes herself to the village witch doctor after using her powers to save ?her best friend, a shape shifter must…” (Escape? Confront? Destroy?)
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    This seems like a good idea for a story, hope this helped.

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  2. Posted: August 30, 2017In:

    Two females of an ancient African tribe who morph into elephants save the life of a young girl but the village witch doctor sees them as abominations and issues their deaths.

    dpg Singularity

    I like Foxtrot25 's polish, but I ?am puzzled by the premise as a whole.The girls do something good -- and witch doctor wants to kill them. ?Why?I realize this is a fantasy. ?And fantasy has dramatic license to bend the rules. ?But once a rule has been bent, it must be consistently bent. Now then, bRead more

    I like Foxtrot25 ‘s polish, but I ?am puzzled by the premise as a whole.

    The girls do something good — and witch doctor wants to kill them. ?Why?

    I realize this is a fantasy. ?And fantasy has dramatic license to bend the rules. ?But once a rule has been bent, it must be consistently bent. Now then, being able to shape shifter is pretty powerful mojo. ?So what credible threat does the witch doctor pose that they can’t fend off? ?If they can bend the rule, ?shape shift to save a village girl’s life, why can’t they likewise bend the rule and shape shift to save their own??

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: August 29, 2017In:

    Ex-Priest struggles against the Devil to prevent his just started B&B into a portal to Hell.

    Fandango1980 Logliner

    Hey Foxtrot 25, Thank you for you comment! Can I use Bed & Breakfast in your line? To give you a bit of a background on the story. Its about a priest that doesn't believe anymore due to dramatic events and starts a new life by running a Bed and Breakfast The first guests arrive and appears to beRead more

    Hey Foxtrot 25,

    Thank you for you comment!
    Can I use Bed & Breakfast in your line?

    To give you a bit of a background on the story.
    Its about a priest that doesn’t believe anymore due to dramatic events and starts a new life by running a Bed and Breakfast
    The first guests arrive and appears to be the devil and his lackeys who wants to turn his B&B into a portal from Hell and start an apocalypse

    I hope to hear you soon!

    Kind Regards,

    Aschwin

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