1. Posted: February 10, 2017In:

    In the year 3000 from the hell-break a homeless ex-soldier takes up an escort mission and receives as payment powerful weapon, with which he’ll battle against the Empire chasing them and deliver his clients to safety.

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    Richiev Singularity

    I am going to attempt to write a logline based on several of these logline attempts: ---------------------------------------------------------- "After dimensional boundaries fail, a sentient ferret hires a gruff mercenary to ?escort her family across the wasteland to safety, but are perused by an anRead more

    I am going to attempt to write a logline based on several of these logline attempts:
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    “After dimensional boundaries fail, a sentient ferret hires a gruff mercenary to ?escort her family across the wasteland to safety, but are perused by an ancient evil who wants a powerful artifact they have in their possession.”

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  2. Posted: January 13, 2017In:

    The last member of an ancient race must learn to once again trust humans. When a geeky teenage boy is the only chance to save everything she knows.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I find the 'last chance to save everything she knows' a bit vague. Sometime vagueness is okay if you can tell what the movie is going to be. But I can't tell yet. Can we have some detail around that please.

    I find the ‘last chance to save everything she knows’ a bit vague. Sometime vagueness is okay if you can tell what the movie is going to be.

    But I can’t tell yet. Can we have some detail around that please.

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  3. Posted: January 13, 2017In:

    A teenage boy is sucked into an ancient world when he finds himself lost in the ruins of a lost civilization, and hunted by by monsters of the dark.

    dpg Singularity

    Agree with Richiev. ?The logline sketches a situation, but not a plot. ?And a logline should sketch a plot. ?So as a result of "being sucked" into an ancient world, what must he do about his predicament? ?What becomes his objective goal?How did he get "sucked into" an ancient world in the 1st place?Read more

    Agree with Richiev. ?The logline sketches a situation, but not a plot. ?And a logline should sketch a plot. ?So as a result of “being sucked” into an ancient world, what must he do about his predicament? ?What becomes his objective goal?

    How did he get “sucked into” an ancient world in the 1st place? ?Please clarify “sucked into”.

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