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TV Series: The world has moved to a new Age of Enlightenment, where certain hidden elements in our genes have unlocked superpowers. However, there are some heroes who suffer from the use of their abilities, sometimes leading to fatal consequences. In the end, they will have to decide which is more important – saving others or preserving their own lives
I like the idea that the super powers are a two-edged sword, both a blessing and a curse. ?This is a standard, ?"feature" of ?extraordinary powers and boons given to mortals in all mythologies in all cultures. ?One that, alas, too many contemporary writers fail to perceive and/or appreciate the archRead more
I like the idea that the super powers are a two-edged sword, both a blessing and a curse. ?This is a standard, ?”feature” of ?extraordinary powers and boons given to mortals in all mythologies in all cultures. ?One that, alas, too many contemporary writers fail to perceive and/or appreciate the archetypal importance of.
Having a good hook, an intriguing concept is necessary for a series–but not sufficient to make a sale. ?The concept for a series needs to be demonstrated with a strong, compelling pilot script that promises to grab and hold an audience’s attention.
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Vince Gilligan, an established ?screenwriter with a solid reputation and plenty of contacts in the industry, didn’t just pitch the concept for “Breaking Bad”. ?He had a “prospectus”, a pilot script, to hand out as a proof of concept.
Likewise, ?this logline needs to spell out the plot of the pilot episode. So:
Who is the protagonist, the lead character of this proposed series?
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What is the initial problem, and the initial, if not ongoing, antagonist?
What becomes the lead character’s objective goal in the pilot as a result of the inciting incident in the context of the (potentially) fatal flaw?
After uncovering a conspiracy plotted by the king a Templar is forced to intervene in the king’s plot before it leads to civil war.
The latest draft is an improvement but it still lacks detail. What will the knight actually do in order to achieve his goal? His actions are going to be most of act 2 i.e most of the film and therefore they need to be specified in the logline. Will he fight other knights? Or investigate suspicious aRead more
The latest draft is an improvement but it still lacks detail.
What will the knight actually do in order to achieve his goal?
His actions are going to be most of act 2 i.e most of the film and therefore they need to be specified in the logline. Will he fight other knights? Or investigate suspicious activity in the royal court? Or seek out spies? etc? What ever he does it needs to be specified.
See lessHeracles is wrongfully accused of murdering his family, he sets off to find the true killer, a goddess.
First of all, the logline ?reveals the solution to the whodunit, which a logline should never do. ? Unless that discovery is the inciting incident ?for a whole different story than identifying the murderer. ?Is it? ? If not, then there goes the mystery and suspense: the guilty one is the goddess ofRead more
First of all, the logline ?reveals the solution to the whodunit, which a logline should never do. ? Unless that discovery is the inciting incident ?for a whole different story than identifying the murderer. ?Is it? ? If not, then there goes the mystery and suspense: the guilty one is the goddess of women marriage, by which I presume you are referring to the Greek goddess, Hera.
What is the story really about? ?What does demigod seek? ?What is his/her objective goal? ?It seems to be to win exoneration from being the presumed murderer. ?
What are the stakes? ?What does the demigod stand to suffer or lose by?not winning exoneration? ?I dunno.
Whatever the stakes are, ?”justice” in terms of punishing Hera ican’t be one of them. ?Because the lady’s?got status and connections. She’s married to the boss of bosses, Greek God Numero Uno, Zeus. ?She’s exempt for the laws that apply to mere demigods and mortals. ?She’s untouchable. ?Those are the rules on Mt. Olympus and a demigod has neither the rank nor the power to do anything about it.
?The story in this logline wouldn’t be an Olympian scandal in the sense of being the 1st time Hera has cursed or killed someone. ?She was ?a very jealous wife and always got revenge on those female demigods and mortals who dallied with her chronically unfaithful husband. ?Cursed and killed with impunity.
You can fudge on some of the rules because, after all, this is a fantasy. ?But generally you have to work within ?the rules of the source material, Greek mythology. If ?the story is going to bulldoze over the rules, ?it needs a very good dramatic reason for doing so.
So what is the plot? ?What is the point of the story?
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