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After Alexander The Great’s death, one of his generals seizes Egypt, fights to restore it into a mighty empire, and eventually becomes Pharoah, founding a dynasty of kings, queens, and gods.
Because this is Historical, it's okay to use Ptolemy's name. What is the main conflict of the story? And who is the face of that conflict? In other words, you say Ptolemy wants to restore Egypt to its former glory... Who is standing in the way of that goal? Who (Or perhaps what) will the lead have tRead more
Because this is Historical, it’s okay to use Ptolemy’s name.
What is the main conflict of the story? And who is the face of that conflict?
In other words, you say Ptolemy wants to restore Egypt to its former glory… Who is standing in the way of that goal? Who (Or perhaps what) will the lead have to overcome so we the reader know what success looks like?
See lessWhen insecure Michelangelo flees to Florence after the pope asks him to paint the Sistine Chapel, he meets an unlikely mentor in a palm reader who prods him into battling his fears so he can become one of the world’s greatest artists.
I did some research in the attempt to refashion into an insecure Michelangelo meeting palm reader, paints “The fortune Teller” which gives him the self-confidence to paint the Sistine Chapel, but history showed otherwise 😉 1512 (Sistine Chapel ceiling) 1594 / 1595 (The Fortune Teller) Consider addinRead more
I did some research in the attempt to refashion into an insecure Michelangelo meeting palm reader, paints “The fortune Teller” which gives him the self-confidence to paint the Sistine Chapel, but history showed otherwise 😉
1512 (Sistine Chapel ceiling)
1594 / 1595 (The Fortune Teller)
Consider adding color to this palm reader, she’s a rumored witch or town drunk.
Leaning towards:
See less“When commanded by the Pope to paint the Sistine Chapel, an insecure Michelangelo flees to Florence only to find himself an unlikely mentor in a palm reader”
When a teenage law student finds a group of Jewish toddlers that have escaped a brutal round-up, she must form a resistance group that smuggles them from Nazi-occupied Amsterdam to foster families in the countryside. Inundated by other desperate Jewish parents, who want to save their children from the camps, the group must work 24/7. Unfortunately, so does the Gestapo. Based on a true story.
I think your logline should consist of just the first sentence you've written, plus the point about other Jewish families requiring help from your MC. That she works non-stop and so does the Gestapo is to be expected and needs not be said. "Inundated" is too uncommon a word, I needed a dictionary toRead more
I think your logline should consist of just the first sentence you’ve written, plus the point about other Jewish families requiring help from your MC. That she works non-stop and so does the Gestapo is to be expected and needs not be said. “Inundated” is too uncommon a word, I needed a dictionary to know it and many others will too. Try using a more familiar word.
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