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When an adrift M?ori minor is stuck in state care, he must befriend a benevolent pedophile to escape the unjust social welfare system of the ?60s.
Great logline and for Australian /NZ, Maori is fine. How young is the boy? and yes trapped is definitely better. Just one tiny thing that makes me wonder - when he enlists the help of the pedophile, it implies to me that he exchanges favours - if that is the case, fine as he exchanges one thing forRead more
Great logline and for Australian /NZ, Maori is fine. How young is the boy? and yes trapped is definitely better.
Just one tiny thing that makes me wonder – when he enlists the help of the pedophile, it implies to me that he exchanges favours – if that is the case, fine as he exchanges one thing for another and does create great conflict but I worry about how that ‘help’ comes. Maybe if we knew about the pedophile – is he conflicted? Sinister? Only likes them younger? And how do they come into play together – is he a foster carer?
Definitely intriguing and I want to hear more!!!
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Yes, I agree with the revised version suggested above. Amidst the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror, the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft broke all the rules of society and religion to fight for women?s rights and for love. I actually thought that acceptance would have been a bigger problem thanRead more
Yes, I agree with the revised version suggested above.
Amidst the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror, the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft broke all the rules of society and religion to fight for women?s rights and for love.
I actually thought that acceptance would have been a bigger problem than love as not many men could have handled her (assuming it was a man she was after). the only thing I ask is why? What caused her to change? step up? Who was she – a teacher? a scholar? A???? Just gives it more life to someone who does know who she is.
I’ve never heard of this woman but definitely would like to know more!!
See lessTo fulfil her destiny, a young queen, who hates war, must unite her southland clans and lead them into one last, decisive battle against the invading barbarians from the north.
So what time are we in? 1600's ? Earlier? To give a sense of time and space. So would not the inciting inciting incident be the death of her father. After the death of her father, a young (genteel? naive? inexperienced? clever? ambitious? ) queen must unite the warring clans of her kingdom toRead more
So what time are we in? 1600’s ? Earlier? To give a sense of time and space.
So would not the inciting inciting incident be the death of her father.
After the death of her father, a young (genteel? naive? inexperienced? clever? ambitious? ) queen must unite the warring clans of her kingdom to survive against the invading barbarians from the north?
I understand there are prequels and there is, I’m thinking, a kind of Game of Thrones epic drama? Maybe you can add in something to the title which adds interest to relationship
After the death of her father, a young (genteel? naive? inexperienced? clever? ambitious? Warrior? ) queen and her sisters, must defeat? the Bada Girl monks to unite the warring clans of her kingdom against the invading barbarians from the north?
That gets your key characters in but with purpose?
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