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After his son is mutilated by a legendary creature, a father must stop future deaths from happening only to learn that he has become the supernatural animan’s next target.
This concept seems like many others in its genre, nothing really seems to hook a reader's attention in the logline. You're clearly aiming at writing a horror movie - great! This genre has been and will continue to be, a staple.? As such,? there are many tropes you can rely on to establish the particRead more
This concept seems like many others in its genre, nothing really seems to hook a reader’s attention in the logline.
You’re clearly aiming at writing a horror movie – great! This genre has been and will continue to be, a staple.? As such,? there are many tropes you can rely on to establish the particular type of horror – it looks like you’ve chosen super natural monster. It may be a good idea to look into as many supernatural horror movies as possible from the last 5 years, try and identify what was common amongst the successful ones. Then try and adjust your concept to include a hook that would draw more interest.
This may not seem like very helpful advise, but when dealing with heavy genre concepts you must have a hook of some sort like; Cabin In the Woods, or an outstandingly original concept like; The Blair Witch Project (the original film). I don’t believe you have either yet…
See lessTisi is a young girl from a religious family that spends her entire time taking care of her mother, in coma for 7 years. Things start to get creepy as Tisi learns that her mother is being harrassed by misterious opponents.
Richiev gave you a good starting point for your next revision, but best you study the information in the Training tab up on the top bar for logline conventions. In answer to your question; Your describing two separate inciting incidents - her discovering she's pregnant and her discovering the mysterRead more
Richiev gave you a good starting point for your next revision, but best you study the information in the Training tab up on the top bar for logline conventions.
In answer to your question;
Your describing two separate inciting incidents – her discovering she’s pregnant and her discovering the mysterious beings. Which of these is the main one for the story as a whole?
I sounds as if her mother’s safty is her main concern, I therefore hold the need for her pregnancy in doubt as this inciting incidetn will require a separate goal and a separate sequence of actions. the story of her protecting her mother will remain unaffected if the preganancy is removed.
Lastly, “…mysterious…” is too vague a description for the antagonist. Best to describe them in a bit more detail – demons, gremlins or dead spirits. What ever you chose to use will describe the genre and will provide more information about the type of story/action in the film.
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Great suggestion. Thanks.
Great suggestion. Thanks.
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