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When a Hell-inspired horror theme park malfunctions, the park’s security chief must rescue thousands of visitors, including his daughter, as the attractions come to life and become Hell on Earth.
Does this occur on Halloween? ?That's the obvious time for people to go to a ?theme park on hell. ?(And the obvious time for the movie to be released.) The twist of the story is the park becomes literally hell on earth. ?Okay. ?However, I would like to see more irony. ?What if the person who must reRead more
Does this occur on Halloween? ?That’s the obvious time for people to go to a ?theme park on hell. ?(And the obvious time for the movie to be released.)
The twist of the story is the park becomes literally hell on earth. ?Okay. ?However, I would like to see more irony. ?What if the person who must rescue his daughter is the owner/designer of the park? ?What he built for his own amusement and profit has turned into his worst nightmare? ?What if he must save his daughter and redeem himself from his greed and hubris?
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See lessEDITED: When a government experiment goes awry, a docile housewife teams up with an ambitious genetic engineer to defend New York City from the man-eating children created from her eggs
This is actually kind of awesome.! I have no idea how 'marketable' this is as a movie, but probably has at least some potential as a horror/action type of movie. I hope the script you have in mind goes over the top, as your logline suggests... A couple of suggestions for the logline- 1. Just to clarRead more
This is actually kind of awesome.! I have no idea how ‘marketable’ this is as a movie, but probably has at least some potential as a horror/action type of movie. I hope the script you have in mind goes over the top, as your logline suggests…
A couple of suggestions for the logline-
1. Just to clarify, I would add something like this to the beginning- “When an experiment to cure cancer goes awry,” (or whatever the original goal of her research was.)
See less2. Instead of teaming up with the armed forces, change that to the main character that assists her, and then characterize that person with an appropriate adjective. Having an interesting combo will add further interest to your story.
3. An adjective to describe your genetic engineer- is she inexperienced or young, or older, or impulsive, etc.?
When a guy finds the courage for a routine procedure that goes wrong, he must fight inner demons or become another unwilling donor in a human chop shop.
"a guy" -- Too vague. "routine procedure" -- I disagree with Richiev here...we don't need to know what the procedure is, it's just going to add more words and become more of a reason for people to pick this apart. "fight inner demons" -- Makes me think this is a story where we go into his mind whileRead more
“a guy” — Too vague.
“routine procedure” — I disagree with Richiev here…we don’t need to know what the procedure is, it’s just going to add more words and become more of a reason for people to pick this apart.
“fight inner demons” — Makes me think this is a story where we go into his mind while he lays on the operating table, and it turns into a “fantasy” setting. If that’s the case, I’m intrigued. Either way, I think you can find a better way to word it.
“human chop shop” — Calls into question the legitimacy of the hospital/surgeon. It implies that the nightmare-scenario is more than his “inner demons,” which is good, but I feel a disconnect between the two that I can’t really explain.
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