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  1. Posted: May 2, 2016In: Horror

    A washed-up news anchor and self-help aficionado, Buck Walsh, finds what may be the saving grace of his career: the lost family home videos from an unsolved double homicide. But watching all 50 minutes of the found footage extravaganza unleashes paranormal forces inside Channel 93’s Public Access TV studio. Buck must put his self-help lessons to the test and discover the demon’s true identity before he becomes the next victim.

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    Added an answer on May 5, 2016 at 2:01 am

    Plot points, objective goals, etc. aside, what theme are you exploring in this story?

    Plot points, objective goals, etc. aside, what theme are you exploring in this story?

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  2. Posted: May 1, 2016In: Horror

    A superstitious woman believes she is being haunted by her psychopathic brother after having visions of his crimes but when her sister remarks that he was only carrying on the legacy of their father, she starts to investigate their mysterious family background.

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    Added an answer on May 2, 2016 at 5:57 am

    Okay, but that's all backstory. ?What's the story going forward? What's the dramatic problem now? that the woman must confront and resolve? ?What is her objective goal for solving the problem? ?Who or what opposes her? ?And what are the stakes-- what does she stand to lose or suffer-- if she fails?

    Okay, but that’s all backstory. ?What’s the story going forward? What’s the dramatic problem now? that the woman must confront and resolve? ?What is her objective goal for solving the problem? ?Who or what opposes her? ?And what are the stakes– what does she stand to lose or suffer– if she fails?

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  3. Posted: April 30, 2016In: Horror

    When a journalist discovers a cult crucifying men in the desert, he believes he has the story of a lifetime if he can live to tell it..

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    Added an answer on April 30, 2016 at 10:37 pm

    >>?When a journalist discovers a cult crucifying men in the desert, he?? >>?must ?do this? in order to ?stop that? or else ?this bad thing will happenRichiev's post raises an important issue. ?Is this version of the logline more of a movie blurb than an a logline? Does it tease more thanRead more

    >>?When a journalist discovers a cult crucifying men in the desert, he??
    >>?must ?do this? in order to ?stop that? or else ?this bad thing will happen

    Richiev’s post raises an important issue. ?Is this version of the logline more of a movie blurb than an a logline? Does it tease more than inform?

    Well, first of all the logline is classified as a horror flick. ?So we know to expect a story where bad, macabre things happen. ?And the logline clearly tells what the bad, macabre is happening.

    There’s also definite inciting incident — the journalist discovers the cult and its ritual.

    So what’s the “must do ” ?– his objective goal that arises from the inciting incident? ?Well, the ethical “must do” ?would be to notify authorities so they can stop the practice. ?That’s should be his highest priority, the correct objective goal.

    But instead, the logline implies that he puts as his highest priority getting the ?story so he can collect the fame and money. ?He places his own selfish interests first. ? IOW: ?he chooses the wrong objective goal — and consequently “the bad thing will happen” — he may pay for it with his life. ?At least, that’s how I read it.

    For me all the do’s and don’t’s for writing a conventional logline are guidelines, not ironclad rules. ?Heck, I don’t even treat them as rules. ?I treat them as tools. ?When they work — and most of the time they do work, they fit the story– use them. ?When they don’t, tinker, try a different tool.

    The “rules”, the tools are means to and end; they exist to serve one objective goal: ?to help a writer to compose a logline make producers and directors want to read the script. ?

    My 2.5 cents worth.

    So even if this version of the logline doesn’t rigorously conform to the standard model, I think it achieves it’s ?objective goal.

    However, I would suggest one more tweak: ?a character flaw to indicate his motivation for choosing the wrong objective goal. ?The journalist is ambitious — too ambitious. ?He’ll do anything to get the story. ?So:

    When a ruthlessly ambitious journalist discovers a female cult that crucifies men, he has the story of a lifetime ? if he?can live to tell it.
    (27 words)

    fwiw

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