1. Posted: March 1, 2016In:

    When a recluse programmer is coerced into camping and survives a Werewolf attack, he must find a cure and escape the sadistic poachers hunting him.

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    Neer Shelter Singularity

    The main character being coerced is not important to the plot and can be cut from the logline, what is important is the Werewolf attack. This describes the genre and gets the story started. Here is my try: After a reclusive programmer survives a Werewolf attack, he must find a cure as he escapes theRead more

    The main character being coerced is not important to the plot and can be cut from the logline, what is important is the Werewolf attack.
    This describes the genre and gets the story started.

    Here is my try:
    After a reclusive programmer survives a Werewolf attack, he must find a cure as he escapes the sadistic Werewolf hunters chasing him.

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  2. Posted: February 8, 2016In:

    Failed documentarian roams the New Mexico mountain hunting a story until he stumbles onto a cult of women crucifying drug dealers to purge sin. He believes he’s found the story of a lifetime if he can live to tell it. Breaking Bad meets The Lottery.

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    Hello, I LOVE the idea: the main character (failed documentarist) and the inciting incident (the crucifiction practices), PLEASE try to articulate the plot starting from that. Try to analyze "the wicker man" (the original and the remake), I think you can find ?some clues about how to structure yourRead more

    Hello, I LOVE the idea: the main character (failed documentarist) and the inciting incident (the crucifiction practices), PLEASE try to articulate the plot starting from that. Try to analyze “the wicker man” (the original and the remake), I think you can find ?some clues about how to structure your story. Maybe the documentarist receive a call from an old friend or an ex collegue telling him to come to the town. ?When he founds his friend crucified. now he knows that he has a story for his documentary… je must understand what happens in the town and make his documentary at the risk of his own life. Something like that?

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  3. Posted: January 16, 2016In:

    When two wealthy teenage brothers move into a small town, one of them tries to seduce a local girl. While the girl’s brother, after witnessing their strange behaviors such as acute sensitivity to sunlight and religious icons, lists the help of his friends to prove that the two brothers are Vampires in disguise.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with Richiev also better to specify a clear and challenging outer goal. If the main character is the new guy in town (suspected vampire) then his goal is to get the girl because he is in love with her, this is as appose to just seducing her. If the main character is the girl's brother then hiRead more

    Agreed with Richiev also better to specify a clear and challenging outer goal.

    If the main character is the new guy in town (suspected vampire) then his goal is to get the girl because he is in love with her, this is as appose to just seducing her. If the main character is the girl’s brother then his goal should be more than just to prove the guy is a vampire, perhaps he needs to run the new guy?out of town or kill him.

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